Irma vs Florida et al

[Tinker]

Irma vs Florida

In a marathon tantrum she
sucked up the ocean and then spit
it out, a kid throwing a fit
with the power to fall a tree.

Land dwellers watch the storm's decree.
To flee or stay they must submit
to the will of the wind's cruel hit
until she moves on finally.

Back through the water and debris
they return to reclaim some bit
of their life before Irma split
their safe world irrefutably.
                   ~~Judi Van Gorder.

[haroldje]

Thanks for your sample redondilla!

[Tinker]

Nice to see you back Harold.

~~Tink

[David W. Parsley]

I like the first stanza especially, very modern in its colloquial phrasing while honoring strictures of form.  Nice use of internal rhyme.

 - Dave

[Tinker]

Thanks David. ~~Tink

[dcmarti1]

Irrefutably, indeed. The form adds a seriousness to this serious event.

[Terry L shuff]

    .  sorry i got confused,just woke up.

Edited September 24, 2017 by Terry L shuff
wrong poem

[Tinker]

Thanks Marti,  So good to see you were shaken, not stirred .

~~Tink