Frank E Gibbard Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 My craft was sinking The mother ship! Going, I’m thinking Like my hopes in The greater game. Going down With the ship Skipper of my own Misfortune but Taking it Traditionally. Shot to pieces, As a species; All aboard, Fated not To succeed, To recede To nothing, Rock bottom. A whole fleet With Davy Jones Whole kit and 'Boodle In His Locker Zilch! Nada! Ground zero! Game over! But I’d Get my enemy Next time. A case of Swings and Roundabouts. Shipping losses, Snowball injuries, Hit a peak Around Christmas Time. (Happy New Year! Frank) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hello Frank, Makes a rather sombre reading this - the sinking of the mother ship and with it my hopes in the greater game . Your mention of Davy Jones took me googling and yes his notorious reputation and presence does seem to chime in with the general gloom in the piece. The details: Ground zero! Game over! has a grim finality about it. I wonder if this alludes to the destruction of any hopes in the middle east and Zimbabwe and the DR Congo? But you could well be describing a board game, which I gather is popular at this time of the year Happy New Year goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 Thanks Golden, hello to you and happy New Year. Yes, much can be read into anything written. It is part of the fun. Had I called this Battleships it's straightway more prosaic - end of story. I like to play games. Cheers, Frank. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 I like how the poem reveals a strategy: My craft was sinking The mother ship! ventures into the tempestuous waters of revenge: Ground zero! Game over! But I’d Get my enemy Next time, and leaves the reader treading in the calm of its wake: Shipping losses, Snowball injuries, Hit a peak Around Christmas Time. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 May this year be better than the last for us all!! Frank an interesting fractured perspective, about so many things at once, quite unlike your straightforward clarity But with your usual flair and precise word choices. I really enjoyed and highly approve, of its motion, its shifting perspectives and its almost scolding tone. Well done! DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Interesting poem, Frank, with nice details, and I like it too the line: The mother ship! Thanks for sharing. ALeksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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