JoelJosol Posted October 19, 2017 Share Posted October 19, 2017 He found me wandering in Quiapo and offered to take me home. That seemed good. He said, 'You need a good bath to remove all that grease off your body.' He led me into a room where there was water and a bucket. He cleaned me up with soap. His hands polished parts of me to his satisfaction. He led me to a bed and said, 'You need rest.' That seemed good. He laid me down. My hair still wet. He said, 'I will take care of you' as he undressed. First, he let go of the pants then underwear, dropping them on the floor. I watched him get close to me, his weight pressing heavily. Then, he got up. Leaving a twenty-peso bill he told me, 'Buy yourself some candy.' That seemed good. In the light of the HW scandal in the media, I thought I would share an old poem of mine that resonates with the times. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted October 19, 2017 Share Posted October 19, 2017 Wow! ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted October 21, 2017 Author Share Posted October 21, 2017 Thank you, Judi. I hope the revulsion it elicits from readers is extracted from them. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 27, 2017 Share Posted October 27, 2017 Disturbingly effective. I think the two-line stanzas and the repetition work well with the subject. Thanks for sharing this, Joel. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dee2 Posted November 12, 2017 Share Posted November 12, 2017 Creepy. And I agree with Tony about the two-line stanzas. The pattern created a rapid progression from one moment to the next, without a unifying flow that might have allowed the protagonist to assemble a full sense of what was happening. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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