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You and I


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You say what I need to hear,

which is one of the reasons I love you.

A word,

A look,

A touch,

A feeling that you understand

what I’m feeling and you understand

what I’m wanting and you know that I understand

you in much the same way.

The way

you look

at me

when we go out somewhere, to a party,

or maybe to dinner, where others will see us

and think, “They look happy together.”

And we’ll know that they’re right.

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Dee, this reads well. It has song-like characteristics. The repetition works.

Tony

PS -- Eastern MA? I grew up in Eastern MA and am there almost every day. We'll have to meet up for coffee/brunch sometime.

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Thanks, Tony. I grew up in central NY, but my wife and I have lived in Franklin, MA for 24 years (after 15 years bouncing from Boston to Framingham, Watertown, Sharon, and Norfolk). And coffee/brunch sounds good.

Dan

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Thanks, Tink. I agree that centering can be gimmicky, but I thought it worked here because of the major differences in line length.

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