Solstice Sundown

[Tinker]

Solstice Sundown

A splash of Merlot
streaks the horizon
painting the western sky
in it's most brilliant hues
to shout the delight
of sailors
in a silent song
as the solstice sun drops
into the sea.
         ~~Judi Van Gorder

Winner WDC The Daily Poem Contest Dec 29, 2017

[badger11]

6 hours ago, Tinker said:

Solstice Sundown

A splash of Merlot
streaks the horizon
to shout the delight
of sailors
in a shanty song
as the solstice drops
into the sea.
         ~~Judi Van Gorder

Just a thought Tink...there is so much vigour in that opening...

enjoyed

badge

 

[Tinker]

Thanks Badge,   ~~Tink

[JoelJosol]

I enjoyed this too but this just a comment - I thought 'painting the western sky/in its most brilliant hues' is redundant. The power of the first two lines were sufficient.

[Tinker]

Hi Joel,  Good point, I always think I need more. 

~~Tink

[tonyv]

Very nice. "Merlot" especially paints the picture.

Tony