Tinker Posted December 22, 2017 Share Posted December 22, 2017 Solstice SundownA splash of Merlotstreaks the horizonpainting the western skyin it's most brilliant huesto shout the delightof sailorsin a silent songas the solstice sun dropsinto the sea. ~~Judi Van Gorder Winner WDC The Daily Poem Contest Dec 29, 2017 Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 22, 2017 Share Posted December 22, 2017 6 hours ago, Tinker said: Solstice SundownA splash of Merlotstreaks the horizonto shout the delightof sailorsin a shanty songas the solstice dropsinto the sea. ~~Judi Van Gorder Just a thought Tink...there is so much vigour in that opening... enjoyed badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 23, 2017 Author Share Posted December 23, 2017 Thanks Badge, ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted December 23, 2017 Share Posted December 23, 2017 I enjoyed this too but this just a comment - I thought 'painting the western sky/in its most brilliant hues' is redundant. The power of the first two lines were sufficient. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 23, 2017 Author Share Posted December 23, 2017 Hi Joel, Good point, I always think I need more. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 24, 2017 Share Posted December 24, 2017 Very nice. "Merlot" especially paints the picture. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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