Tinker Posted December 22, 2017 Posted December 22, 2017 Solstice SundownA splash of Merlotstreaks the horizonpainting the western skyin it's most brilliant huesto shout the delightof sailorsin a silent songas the solstice sun dropsinto the sea. ~~Judi Van Gorder Winner WDC The Daily Poem Contest Dec 29, 2017 Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to [email protected]
badger11 Posted December 22, 2017 Posted December 22, 2017 6 hours ago, Tinker said: Solstice SundownA splash of Merlotstreaks the horizonto shout the delightof sailorsin a shanty songas the solstice dropsinto the sea. ~~Judi Van Gorder Just a thought Tink...there is so much vigour in that opening... enjoyed badge Quote
Tinker Posted December 23, 2017 Author Posted December 23, 2017 Thanks Badge, ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to [email protected]
JoelJosol Posted December 23, 2017 Posted December 23, 2017 I enjoyed this too but this just a comment - I thought 'painting the western sky/in its most brilliant hues' is redundant. The power of the first two lines were sufficient. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
Tinker Posted December 23, 2017 Author Posted December 23, 2017 Hi Joel, Good point, I always think I need more. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to [email protected]
tonyv Posted December 24, 2017 Posted December 24, 2017 Very nice. "Merlot" especially paints the picture. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
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