eclipse Posted January 18, 2018 Share Posted January 18, 2018 Ruby the wife of Kevin Holland passed away while he was at sea on the fishing boat he had named after her. Kevin was devastated by her death, he painted the hour glass she had given him as a gift. Kevin went for an early evening walk on the beach and could see two figures emerge from the sea, they walked across to two deck chairs left a shell on each one then vanished. Kevin put the shells in turn against his ear, he could the voice of ruby and another woman, this made him drowsy -he slept in one of the chairs, one of the figures returned to whisper in Kevin's ear, a mermaid had given Ruby eternal life and when he returned to sea he heard them both chanting his name like an incantation. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted January 18, 2018 Share Posted January 18, 2018 Hi Barry, This is very different from your usual. It simply tells a story. I couldn't help look for some of your unique images that make your work special. L11 I think you need the word verb "heard" or maybe substitute a different verb, you are so good at synesthesia. (I guess that is what I miss, your canny ability to surprise us.) A poignant story very clearly told. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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