Tinker Posted January 29, 2018 Share Posted January 29, 2018 Pantoum Circle"A slinky going down a flight of stairs,"a fluid, repetitious rolling verse.A crafted Pantoum's lines repeat in pairsin smooth and equal rhythm, never terse.A fluid, repetitious, rolling verse,the Malay fishing song arrived in France,in smooth and equal rhythm, never terse,it passed to Victor Hugo just by chance.The Malay fishing song arrived in France,a lyrical endeavor at its best,it passed to Victor Hugo just by chance.Inspired from afar we join the quest.A lyrical endeavor at its best the chant-like sounds sing mystic, old and new,inspired from afar we join the quest. We honor ancient artists two by two.The chant-like sounds sing mystic, old and new.A crafted Pantoum's lines repeat in pairs,we honor ancient artists two by two."A slinky going down a flight of stairs."* ~~Judi Van Gorder*Miriam Sagan, The Unbroken Line A Pantoum Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 30, 2018 Share Posted January 30, 2018 Very nicely done, Judi. I've seen plenty of sonnets about the sonnet, but this one's a first, and it's all about the pantoum. I like how you incorporated the quote. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted January 30, 2018 Author Share Posted January 30, 2018 Thanks Tony. I have to admit I am on a mission to demonstrate that writing in form is just not line count, meter and rhyme. Most of the established forms have a whole history behind them, that history fascinates me. The original concept is part of the craft of writing. The French Pantoum is inspired by Malay folk verse, originally a fishing song. The rhythm of the verse attempted to emulate the rhythm of the oars of the fishermen rowing out in unison. That is at the heart of the form, not the rhyme scheme or line count. The history is really what I like best about writing in form. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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