tonyv Posted February 5, 2018 Share Posted February 5, 2018 Brown sunlight creeps through slats around edges and tans her naked shoulder. The smudged stemware on last night's table observes his restlessness. Away, where summer lingers, clusters droop and await, patiently, the harvest. He reaches for a glass. She lets him. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted February 6, 2018 Share Posted February 6, 2018 Ooooh sensual Tony. I love how the glass, the wine and cluster of grapes weave through the action. This is complex in its simplicity. Nice, nice, nice. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 6, 2018 Author Share Posted February 6, 2018 Thank you, Judi. Complexity in simplicity is nice. This is my first attempt at an aubade, but I figure it's not necessary for every aubade to be called "Aubade." Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted February 7, 2018 Share Posted February 7, 2018 I love that you are writing more. It is so easy to get out of routine. And I know are such a perfectionist you only want to post a polished finished piece, with the exception of posting in the workshop. You can post less perfect stuff you know. Just write. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted February 8, 2018 Share Posted February 8, 2018 Very much enjoyed this Tony, particularly the acquiescence in the concluding line. best Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 12, 2018 Author Share Posted February 12, 2018 On February 6, 2018 at 9:15 PM, Tinker said: ... You can post less perfect stuff you know. Just write ... I'm trying, Judi, I'm trying! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 12, 2018 Author Share Posted February 12, 2018 On February 8, 2018 at 4:02 PM, badger11 said: Very much enjoyed this Tony, particularly the acquiescence in the concluding line. best Phil Thanks, Phil. I like that, too. I think there are some layers just in that line: he reaches for the glass, not for her; he reaches for the glass and for her; etc. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted February 13, 2018 Share Posted February 13, 2018 Same appreciation as Tinker once I figured out what stemware is :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 13, 2018 Author Share Posted February 13, 2018 12 hours ago, JoelJosol said: Same appreciation as Tinker once I figured out what stemware is :-) Thanks, Joel. I figured I'd get specific. Didn't want to use glass/glasses twice in a short poem. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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