douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 it is the pause suspended between weightlessness and gravity where time stands still for infinity and then disappears completely it is that space through which darkness and light flow simultaneously it is the turning point where form meets formlessness where water floats and secrets are revealed it is the home of the universal savant whose wisdom lies in one word magnificently powerful in its singularity it is the very portal between galaxies and dimensions the name of eternity which can not be transcribed Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Douglas, as always, your struggle to give voice to silence, is admirable and well wrought. Have you read the non-dual theorists? I have been particularly impressed with Genpo Roshi's Big Mind Work... http://bigmind.org/Home.html I think, you will be impressed... Enjoyable as always! Many Thanks Douglas! DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Douglas, This part is quite profound: the name of eternity which can not be transcribed. It brings to mind the part in the Old testament of the Bible where God says that his name is simply "I AM THAT I AM." Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 it is that space through which darkness and light flow simultaneously How wonderful stanza. Doug, the poem is very nice. The poem abounds in originality and deepness. Also in your poem are some bridges between expression some quite sound as connection: where water floats and secrets are revealed I love the ending part: it is the very portal between galaxies and dimensions the name of eternity which can not be transcribed The last two lines hits. Wonderful Douglas. Very well expressed poem. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 thank you all for your comments! so nice to be in touch with you again! no, dr con, i have not read the non-dual theorists - but i will delve into them upon your suggestion! light to you all... Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pawn shop Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Killer !! This is the type of poem that needs to be recited on a cd. This type of material awakens me.....and makes me consider the wonders of life . Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 gravity... infinity ... completely... simultaneously ... magnificently... singularity ... eternity the repeating "ee" here is really cool (how is this called? is it technically rhyme? its not alliteration, is it? I forget)- seems to my ear well spaced and well placed ... this is the sort of poem-stuff that I consider my home ground... the things that are being pointed to here- the edges of philosophy - and this poem travels these edges smoothly and deftly- its been here before, and it knows the way... but as a poem, the feel and sound and the beat of it is terrific! Love this work... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 pawn shop - thank you for your enthusiasm about this poem. i am so happy that it made you consider the wonders of life. i try to consider and grasp them all the time myself, and, whenever i feel awed or overwhelmed by existence i try to express what i am seeing or feeling about it through poetry. i do readings and performances of my poetry, and i shall certainly read this aloud to an audience in the future - and think of your kind words as i do. thank you, douglas Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 dearest rumisong (rumi is one of my favorite poets by the way) thank you for your observations and interest in this poem. you are indeed correct in observing the slightly philosophical edge to this poem. lately i can't seem to write a poem that does not touch upon philosophical or existential subject matter - however i do try to allow the poetry i write to flow out of me as organically and naturally as possible - without intellectualizing the subject matter too much. i see how you have picked up upon the words that have a similar resonance. this was not a conscious effort on my part, but rather a product of inspiration. i agree that the words do uphold the rhythm and create a nice pace when read. i guess you could call it rhyme - to answer your question. thank you for loving this piece of work. douglas Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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