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scissor tailed fly catcher


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The flycatcher cuts through the paper wind

announcing the drowning flight of winter's
satellite. Summer arrives reflecting the bird
flying backwards in it's mirror. The night observes
the flycatchers skydance-it balances streams and
rivers teaching them the moves-they dance with
the ghosts of Oklahoma. Two birds stream across
the sky like shadows from a fire.
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Barry, there's lots of niceness going on here: the paper wind, winter's satellite, summer's arrival with birds flying backwards in its mirror, and that skydance with a ghostly mention of Oklahoma. I like that the night observes the skydance. The speaker and reader are there, too, albeit in the background.

The last lines are remarkably vivid:

... Two birds stream across
the sky like shadows from a fire.

I picture it: dusk to darkness with only the shadows/outlines of the birds remaining against the darkening sky.

I'm impressed that you chose this bird. This poem is one of your best. It's very much to my liking.

Tony

 

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  • 4 weeks later...

The same lines called out by Tony also caught my eye. The "shadows from a fire" tested my imagination.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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