douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 the morning crisp and clear the sunlight golden and vivid pouring through branches and translucent leaves breathing in freshness tinged with coldness it's like breathing in piano sonatas being played at dawn by Beethoven above the sky is resplendent hiding the symphony of the universe powder blue to the right dazzling white to the left the sun majestic and everywhere to me i am here alone holding life dancing to its rhythm the tree's shadow is upon my skin and the sun and the breeze and the morning we are all one Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hello Douglas, my dear Doug. I missed you and your poetry around. But why you needed such of long time to shop up here :). But now I'm happy to see you and read your poetry again. I love this poem my friend. It's full with beautiful imageries, and wonderful expression. The lyric here works wonderful. It have some lonely and sad sound, but that's fine in poem like this. I love most of the expressions, they are so emotional and very metaphorical, as this one: it's like breathing in piano sonatas being played at dawn by Beethoven Much enjoyed in this poem Doug. I hope you will share more of your work. Really I am glad to see you here, thank you for join and sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 I think this is the most powerful poem out of the ones you have posted so far, but I think it would be even more powerful if you ended it with the penultimate line. The title is fantastic. It helps ground the poem in reality. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 thank you aleks my angel - it is good to be here. nice enrgy! tony thank you too. do you mean that perhaps i leave out the last line - we are all one? i am not too sure? do let me know. Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 tony thank you too. do you mean that perhaps i leave out the last line - we are all one? i am not too sure? do let me know. It's a wonderful poem, Douglas -- it "takes me there," and once I'm there, I want to stay. The last line breaks the spell for me ... Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hello Douglas, What a contrast this poem is to Pride! Here you use beautiful colors and light to express a sense of being alive and attuned to the beauty of the world around you: i am here alone holding life dancing to its rhythm the tree's shadow is upon my skin and the sun and the breeze and the morning Wonderfully sensuous and celebratory! goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 thank you goldenlangur! yes, us humans are complex creatures - filled to the brim with a multiplicity of emotions and feelings. this was a beautiful morning and i had to take a poetic photograph of it. light to you, douglas Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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