Tinker Posted March 12, 2018 Share Posted March 12, 2018 Memory Lane In a small space, somewhere inside my head, obscured from sight by tangled limbs of thought and brambles of unfulfilled dreams, there is a hazy, lazy lane where memories of an almost forgotten past dwell. Sometimes an image, a touch or taste on my tongue will take me there. But I don't linger long. I prefer the clear path before me. ~~Judi Van Gorder Prompt, write a 12 line minimum poem titled, Memory Lane. Frame at the discretion of the poem. Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 31, 2018 Share Posted March 31, 2018 This is lyrical, lovely. I totally get the nostalgia. I would drop the last line; I think that part has already been expressed, shown in the penultimate line. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted March 31, 2018 Share Posted March 31, 2018 Agreed, the final line is not only redundant, it dissipates the nuance of what precedes. Nice insights. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 1, 2018 Author Share Posted April 1, 2018 Thanks Tony and Dave, you are right... I have to break myself of that. I actually won first place with this poem in a WCD contest. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terry L shuff Posted June 20, 2018 Share Posted June 20, 2018 I visit that place often,too often. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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