Tinker Posted March 13, 2018 Posted March 13, 2018 Saturday Sleeping In I slide from the warmth of my bed, hardwood cold under foot, and tie back the seafoam curtains to welcome the morning light. Remnants of winter linger outside, Patches of snow tap down the promise of Spring. Branches, still bare, wait for a warmer day. Looks like my neighbors slept in too. Downstairs, I make myself a cup of coffee then return. I look at my lone bed stand and brush my hand across your untouched space reminders that you are gone from me forever. I climb under my still warm, soft grey comforter and prop my pillow to read in the quiet calm. ~ ~ Judi Van Gorder Prompt: Write a poem of perception using the details from this picture. Saturday Morning Sleeping In Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
badger11 Posted March 17, 2018 Posted March 17, 2018 Lovely Tink. Especially S1 and S2. Love the picture of ordinariness in those. Quote
Tinker Posted March 17, 2018 Author Posted March 17, 2018 Thanks Badge, The exercise was to include as many details from the photo as I could see and then embellish with my imagination to bring it home. After this sits a while, I think I'll come back and trim it up. Not every detail need be mentioned in the finished poem away from the exercise. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
JoelJosol Posted March 22, 2018 Posted March 22, 2018 I like S3 best. It is the peak of the poem. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
tonyv Posted March 31, 2018 Posted March 31, 2018 I, too, like the third stanza. It adds profundity to the picture that would otherwise resemble a still life. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
Tinker Posted October 6, 2019 Author Posted October 6, 2019 Bloody Portal What’s behind the red door? The night had me restless no sleep since I heard that sound. That eire, strange strangling coming from across the way, loud enough to travel up to my window. Jumping up and looking out I saw a crack of light as the scarlet entry closed. Was that a foot I saw dragged inside? Something sinister stays within those seemingly normal walls. The climbing chill sends me back to the warmth of my grey down comforter but slumber alludes ‘til daybreaks. ~~ Judi Van Gorder Same Prompt photo: Morning Bedroom Photo Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
tonyv Posted October 10, 2019 Posted October 10, 2019 Judi, should "Bloody Portal" be its own topic? I'm excited by this poem and want to reply, but it's included here in the "Saturday Morning" topic ... Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
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