Tinker Posted June 7, 2018 Posted June 7, 2018 Tom's Alley He crouches on a rusty garbage lid, witness to the alley’s transgressions the shadows, the debris, the stink of stale booze and urine. The tinkle-clank of a glass bottle rolls across the alley-way while he stalks a long tailed rat darting from the basement of an adjacent building. Later he grooms himself licking his feral fur and rubbing his scared face with his paws, wary of approaching angry voices. An escalation of shouts and screams startles him from his perch and he ducks beneath discarded boxes. A grizzled man throws a skinny girl against a wall and stabs her twice. Blood spatters Tom's hide-away. With a yeowl, he skitters from his sanctuary into the silence of the night. ~~Judi Van Gorder Inspired by The Fly Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
tonyv Posted June 10, 2018 Posted June 10, 2018 I was about to suggest that the poet win the feline's trust with some food and take him home (after a trip to the groomer of course), and then I got to the surprise twist! An unexpected and welcome surprise. Tony ? Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
Tinker Posted June 11, 2018 Author Posted June 11, 2018 Out of my comfort zone and I wasn't sure how this would be perceived by the reader. It wasn't entirely what I set out to do but it seemed to just develop on its own. The diminishing lines of the stanzas restricted yet pushed the experience forward. The "twist" was the unknown, do I include it, should I change to a drug deal going down, or thugs robbing someone, all scenarios that went through my brain. But I only had 3 lines by my own design. Thanks for recognizing it. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
Aleksandra Posted June 16, 2018 Posted June 16, 2018 Wow, Tink... An amazing one. I miss words to express myself after reading this. Wow, guys, reading you after a long break, it makes me feel very ignorant lol. You are great, very progressive and different. Thank you Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia
Tinker Posted June 16, 2018 Author Posted June 16, 2018 Aleks, So nice to hear from you. You made my morning happy. I hope your break from us was full of adventure, laughter and love. Now don't go away again, share your stories I can't wait to read. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
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