eclipse Posted September 6, 2018 Share Posted September 6, 2018 Deliver this child who has lost an eye to a hospital, convey the conflict in a three minute clip then cut to the adverts. Child is having a seizure on a hospital bed, shake out the truth from the political matrix. On facebook a photograph leaks the blood from a child's bloody limb onto the pictures of those killed in war. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted September 11, 2018 Share Posted September 11, 2018 How truth is conveyed...how trust in that truth undermined...how much truth is valued...cut to the adverts...answers that last question. good one Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted September 15, 2018 Share Posted September 15, 2018 Barry, I like your recent war poems. Powerful stuff, along the lines of Black Sabbath's War Pigs. Peace through superior firepower -- good. Aggression … probably bad. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted September 16, 2018 Author Share Posted September 16, 2018 Thanks tony.they were written for a contest. Are they good enough.. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted September 17, 2018 Share Posted September 17, 2018 22 hours ago, eclipse said: Thanks tony.they were written for a contest. Are they good enough.. You should know my response by now, Barry: "Is the contest good enough for your poem(s)?" Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted September 17, 2018 Author Share Posted September 17, 2018 Thanks tony for this website... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted September 29, 2018 Share Posted September 29, 2018 Hi Barry, Good luck with the contest, it is always nice to know someone is reading your work and contests are a way of getting your work out there, win or lose. The judging itself is often a matter of preference. As far as this poem, if I were a judge you'd be a contender. This poem touched me, it wasn't pretty and it wasn't something I would want to come back to, but it was real. I felt shame in it as if I, somehow, was responsible for this child and failed him. That's good writing. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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