war child

[eclipse]

Deliver this child who has lost an eye

to a hospital, convey the conflict in a

three minute clip then cut to the adverts.

Child is having a seizure on a hospital bed,

shake out the truth from the political matrix.

On facebook a photograph leaks the blood

from a child's bloody limb onto the pictures

of those killed in war.

[badger11]

How truth is conveyed...how trust in that truth undermined...how much truth is valued...cut to the adverts...answers that last question.

good one

[tonyv]

Barry, I like your recent war poems. Powerful stuff, along the lines of Black Sabbath's War Pigs.

Peace through superior firepower -- good. Aggression … probably bad.

Tony

[eclipse]

Thanks tony.they were written for a contest. Are they good enough..

[tonyv]

22 hours ago, eclipse said:

Thanks tony.they were written for a contest. Are they good enough..

You should know my response by now, Barry: "Is the contest good enough for your poem(s)?"

Tony 

[eclipse]

Thanks tony for this website...

[Tinker]

Hi Barry, Good luck with the contest, it is always nice to know someone is reading your work and contests are a way of getting your work out there, win or lose.  The judging itself is often a matter of preference.   As far as this poem, if I were a judge you'd be a contender.  This poem touched me, it wasn't pretty and it wasn't something I would want to come back to, but it was real. I felt shame in it as if I, somehow, was responsible for this child and failed him.  That's good writing.

~~Tink