FrasMac Posted November 18, 2018 Share Posted November 18, 2018 Open Doors The Hook was where the freedom came. Riding fast, we claimed the land for Scots Who had come to get some sun into our hearts. Das autobahn opened up beyond no border, Ferdinand’s finest ripping past, free radicals Rocking in their free world of no limits - At least, some of the time. Food and friendship Freely fashioned in the Fuhrer’s Karlsruhe, The Youth long gone, thank God for modern sanity. I had met two of them years before, tripping On a Stolperstein. Two castrated wolves, still Barking back to a blacker Bavaria, before our Desired progeny cried through her birth canal Blinking, into a world projecting longing light. The child though grown, still fights inherited disease. On one day she cried all day, huge sobs for All the blood she lost, great torrents of tears On her remembered mountains. I love her rain, Much warmer than the rain of home, and so much More absolving. The sun shunned Switzerland But welcomed us with open arms to Lombardy. Two weeks later we are back with little Anne In Amsterdam. We remember fenceless fields in France, Belgian beer in castles, Italian wine for sympathy, And everywhere we went were open doors. Otto Frank would not have wanted this, his house Caged in sadness, to be the highlight of our holiday. 17/11/18 Born out of a motorcycle tour which my wife and I undertook, and my musings on the UK's current arguings over Brexit. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted November 24, 2018 Share Posted November 24, 2018 Hi Mac, The imagery of this piece ranges from golden sun to dark clouds. It is a wide landscape showing a rich and tragic history . I felt conflicting emotions while reading. I wanted more. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 2, 2018 Share Posted December 2, 2018 Remarkably well written. I love the personification throughout the first stanza. How you wrap things up in the second delivers a sense of relief. This took me there ... Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrasMac Posted December 5, 2018 Author Share Posted December 5, 2018 Thank you both very much for your feedback. Conflicting emotions is exactly how I feel about the whole political landscape surrounding the UK and Europe at present. On the one hand I understand why we want to protect our own, but cannot help feeling that we are perhaps about to back down on a sacrifice which has already borne good fruit. We shall see. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 6, 2018 Share Posted December 6, 2018 PS -- FrasMac and others, I'm not saying you have to do this -- you can use any spacing you want -- but if you want to use single-spaces from line to line, just hold down the shift key when you hit Enter/Return at the end of a line: To single space Just hold down Shift When you hit Enter/Return At the end of a line Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrasMac Posted December 6, 2018 Author Share Posted December 6, 2018 Thanks Tony. I had been trying to find the instructions for that! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted December 10, 2018 Share Posted December 10, 2018 Like Tony, I felt "there", in both the places and in your own conflict. Loved the alliterations: fenceless fields; Belgian beer. Grand imagery. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted December 11, 2018 Share Posted December 11, 2018 I agree! Beautiful, well conceived and a delight with its internal conflicts, historical allusions, and beautiful images. An absolute delight. J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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