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JoelJosol
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You are here. There is no site map as guide

to find the nearest exit.

 

A scan for the familiar (I am no liar)

will not yield the path. Stay

 

and check each word instead.

Get drenched in the meaninglessness.

 

Don't look at your watch wondering

when will I point the way out.

 

How much time do you have?

I only have one period left.

 

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You are here. There is no site map

as guide to find the nearest exit.

A scan for the familiar

(I am no liar), will not yield the path.

Stay and dip your eyes on words instead.

Get drenched in the meaninglessness.

You look at your watch wondering

when will I point the way out.

How much time do you have?

I only have one more period.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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JoelJosol.

 

A marvelous existential romp- From Sartre to Derrida, you got it all! Well done...

 

Much enjoyed!

 

DC

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You're too generous, DrC! Thanks anyways :-)

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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goldenlangur

Hello JoelJosol,

 

There's a sense of collision of emotions and expectations perhaps an estrangement between two people

:

You are here. There is no site map

as guide to find the nearest exit.

A scan for the familiar

(I am no liar), will not yield the path.

 

There's a hint of one being trapped, perhaps at the mercy of the other who has betrayed. The details:

 

will not yield the path, meaninglessness, you look at your watch, How much time do you have?

I only have one more period

all build up to anger, even accusation.

 

 

One senses disappointment, rage and pain.

 

 

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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GL, I am glad you got that sense. The original title of this piece was supposed to be a metaphor of a worldview of life, "Labyrinth". But, it would give away the poem.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Aleksandra
You are here. There is no site map

as guide to find the nearest exit.

A scan for the familiar

(I am no liar), will not yield the path.

Stay and dip your eyes on words instead.

Get drenched in the meaninglessness.

You look at your watch wondering

when will I point the way out.

How much time do you have?

I only have one more period

 

 

Wonderful poem with a good aesthetics. The richness of a good expressions makes this poem compact and strong.

Very well written Joel.

 

Glad to read this.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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I like it, Joel. "You are here" can be good or bad, and though the general sense seems to be one of being lost --

A scan for the familiar

(I am no liar), will not yield the path

-- the title implies that there is a way out.

 

Tony

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Thank you, too, Alek and Tony.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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yes, this poem is charged with a steaming set of emotions which simmer just below the surface. very well articulated and emotionally insightful. enjoyed the sense of drama and passion too...

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

never read this one before joel. very interesting write. thank you.

 

victor

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