Tinker Posted December 19, 2018 Share Posted December 19, 2018 From the Heart Exhausted from his midnight trek Old Nick collapsed in a fold. These annual Christmas trips were harder and harder each year. While his hips got larger and larger and he became less quick. To Santa with Love. He drug his almost empty sack from the sleigh and said, "What ho? What is this that I missed?" It tumbled to the snow. Had he been remiss? A gift to whom? He'd like to know, but wait . . To Santa with Love. He raised his eyebrow in discovery mode when recognizing the hand of Lilly Elf, the precious pixie in charge of "do it yourself" she spoke for all when she tearfully wrote the ode. To Santa with Love. It seems his elves noticed his growing girth and decided he needed a scheduled, active life so gifted a Fit-Bit to help Santa thrive and cookies scratched from his diet herewith. To Santa with Love. ~~Judi Van Gorder Notes: ▼ Theme: Sad Santa. Santa's been all 'round the world and every single deserving person on his journey has gotten one of Santa's gifts. But he has just discovered that he still has one small gift left in the bottom of his pack. He doesn't know what to do! Cannot give it to the world. It doesn't contain a cure for any disease, it can't make everyone nice, isn't money and it can't bring world peace. It isn't an embodiment of hope or joy. It is a concrete thing that can be placed in a box, wrapped and given. While not necessarily a toy, it is something one can hold in their hands. Who gets it? Why? What is it? What will make Santa happy? Hurry, dawn is approaching and Santa must give out everything in his pack before the first rays of the sun break the horizon. Words to use: precious, tear, eyebrow, fold Forbidden words: none today Additional parameters: Rhyming - must use at least 3 'slant' rhymes, descriptive, at least 15 lines. Stanzaic Form Used: The Tennyson is a stanzaic form patterned after Ask Me No More by English poet, Alfred Lord Tennyson (1802-1892). The elements of the Tennyson are: stanzaic, written in any number of cinquains. metric, iambic, L1-L4 are pentameter and L5 is dimeter. rhymed, envelope rhyme scheme abbaC deedC fggfC etc. written in with L5 as a refrain repeated from stanza to stanza Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 19, 2018 Share Posted December 19, 2018 😁lovely seasonal cheer Tink typo on drug? best badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 19, 2018 Author Share Posted December 19, 2018 Thanks Badge, but "drug" ??? isn't that correct, he drug the blanket behind him? He drug it around the room... Is there another way to spell it? Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 19, 2018 Share Posted December 19, 2018 I found this Tink... https://www.grammarly.com/blog/dragged-drug/ American dialect😁 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 19, 2018 Author Share Posted December 19, 2018 Thanks for the article Badge, interesting. I've been asking everyone I encounter today, and they all agree, "drug" is how it should be said. Haha.... It must be a California thing. Now its a quandary, how do I write proper English and sound like me? "dragged" sounds so awkward to my ear. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 19, 2018 Share Posted December 19, 2018 Dialect is fine. I use it all the time! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrasMac Posted December 20, 2018 Share Posted December 20, 2018 Hi Tink this made me laugh, once I'd got past "drug" which is a distinctly American way of saying "dragged", which nobody in the UK uses. Also "Old Nick" in Scotland refers to the Devil, whereas Santa would be "Saint Nick" - but I liked the poem, what form is this please? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 21, 2018 Author Share Posted December 21, 2018 Thanks Mac, I've always contended that the proper form of English is only spoken here in Cali. 😂 Surf's up dude. The form was in the notes but somehow the link was skewed. I fixed it. It is the Tennyson which is an invented form found in Pathways for the Poet taken from the frame of Tennyson's, Ask Me No More. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 30, 2018 Share Posted December 30, 2018 LOL, I've always said dragged, haven't heard drug, but I have heard more than one person around here say stood when he meant stayed. The one I would have to look up before using it would be "lie" as in lie down. "Did I lie down?" "I lay down?" I'm too lazy to look it up in the moment. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 30, 2018 Author Share Posted December 30, 2018 Well in all fairness Tony, you do live on the other side of the continent and you do speak with a funny accent. As I said, it's a California thing. 😎 ~~Tink ~~ Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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