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Larsen M. Callirhoe
Posted

this is my revised version. the old version is at the bottom. i was told this first version that i as holding back so i added some stuff in it. enjoy.

 

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The First Time We Made Love

 

 

The setting could not have been any better

than a warm overcast day.

The temp was around 80 degrees Fahrenheit.

 

I picked her up at her parents house.

She was wearing a tan high cut shorts

and a blouse that covered her mid drift.

I was wearing a white t-shirt

with a design on the front

and blue jean shorts.

 

We were both freshly bathed.

I was wearing cologne.

She smelled like Apple shampoo.

She had told me

she does not like wearing perfume

though I desired for her to do so.

 

We stopped off at a convenience store

and bought non alcoholic beverages

since she was only eighteen years old

on the way to where I lived at the time.

I was twenty-five years old at the time.

 

The reason I had dated

and then married her despite

the age difference was the last girl I dated

was only sixteen years old

and also the first chick

I had sex with but we never made love.

 

We went back to the place I was staying at.

I cooked her dinner of steamed chicken, rice,

green beans, and apple sauce for dessert.

 

Before we ate I turned on my stereo

and played PacoBell classical music.

I also lit candles and incense.

 

We ate dinner.

After we ate I washed the dishes.

 

While I was washing dishes

she went back to my bedroom

and undressed and hopped

into my king-sized bed.

 

I went looking for her

after I was done

putting the dried off dishes away.

 

I found her in my bedroom

naked and aroused.

This made me so horny.

Her skin was so soft and white.

Her juices flowed like a river.

Her flood gates were open for passion.

I saw the juices

flowing out of her wet vagina.

instantly I got erect.

 

I wasn’t planning on having sex with her

let alone making love to her that evening.

She was real nervous.

 

My thoughts were wow

she is so beautiful naked.

I took my clothes off slowly

staring at her the whole time.

 

I climbed on top of her.

In my night stand next to the bed

I grabbed a lubricated condom

out of the top drawer.

Lucky for me

I had happened to have the condom on me

because I had just become sexually active

at age twenty-five.

 

 

I entered her and we made love

for one hour and forty-five minutes.

Before I entered her I put the condom on.

 

This evening was magical from six to almost eight

in the evening we were both in bliss.

I don’t think we ever captured that magic

of that moment though we tried many times

many nights afterwards but the first time

was still the best sex we ever shared Joyce and I.

 

She dressed after the sex

and said I need to get home.

 

I can not get this evening

out of my head.

After I had dropped her off

she told her mother

I and her were now sexually active.

I was actually not planning on having sex

with her till we were at least engaged

if the relationship lasted that long.

 

I definitely became pussy-whipped

after this experience.

 

I will never forget how wet

her vagina had become.

She was really attracted to me.

 

*****

 

 

 

 

The First Time We Made Love

 

 

The setting could not have been any better

than a warm overcast day.

The temp was around 80 degrees Fahrenheit.

 

I picked her up at her parents house.

She was wearing a tan high cut shorts

and a blouse that covered her mid drift.

I was wearing a white t-shirt

with a design on the front

and blue jean shorts.

 

We were both freshly bathed.

I was wearing cologne.

She smelled like Apple shampoo.

 

We stopped off at a convenience store

and bought non alcoholic beverages

since she was only eighteen years old

on the way to where I lived at the time.

 

We went back to the place I was staying at.

I cooked her dinner of steamed chicken, rice,

green beans, and apple sauce for dessert.

 

Before we ate I turned on my stereo

and played PacoBell classical music.

I also lit candles and incense.

 

We ate dinner.

After we ate I washed the dishes.

 

While I was washing dishes

she went back to my bedroom

and undressed and hopped

into my king-sized bed.

 

I went looking for her

after I was done

putting the dried off dishes away.

 

I found her in my bedroom

naked and aroused.

This made me so horny.

Her skin was so soft and white.

Her juices flowed like a river.

Her flood gates were open for passion.

 

I entered her and we made love

for one hour and forty-five minutes.

Before I entered her I put a condom on.

 

This evening was magical from six to almost eight

in the evening we were both in bliss.

I don’t think we ever captured that magic

of that moment though we tried many times

many nights afterwards but the first time

was still the best sex we ever shared Joyce and I.

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Posted

Wow, this sounds like a confession but without remorse :-)

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

Posted

A vivid account of summer(?) love in the Sunshine State, Victor. I like the detail you provide here:

The setting could not have been any better

than a warm overcast day.

The temp was around 80 degrees Fahrenheit.

 

I picked her up at her parents house.

She was wearing a tan high cut shorts

and a blouse that covered her mid drift.

I was wearing a white t-shirt

with a design on the front

and blue jean shorts.

 

We were both freshly bathed.

I was wearing cologne.

She smelled like Apple shampoo.

And it's admirable that you observed the local rules:

We stopped off at a convenience store

and bought non alcoholic beverages

since she was only eighteen years old

It would be interesting to find out how your experiences compare with those of other people. You certainly set the bar high --

... we made love

for one hour and forty-five minutes

-- so it's no wonder you felt like this:

I don’t think we ever captured that magic

of that moment though we tried many times

many nights afterwards but the first time

was still the best ...

Even so, with these youthful memories, at least you had something to strive for. If you don't aim high, you'll never even try.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Posted

very sexy and very romantic...

 

 

"I don’t think we ever captured that magic

of that moment though we tried many times

many nights afterwards but the first time

was still the best sex we ever shared Joyce and I."

 

this stanza captures the spirit of the poem, in my opinion.

 

thank you for sharing this intimate story with us...

To receive love, you have to give it...

Larsen M. Callirhoe
Posted
Wow, this sounds like a confession but without remorse :-)

 

 

thanks joel for commenting. you made me smile. actually it is biographical in nature and attent.

 

larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Larsen M. Callirhoe
Posted
A vivid account of summer(?) love in the Sunshine State, Victor. I like the detail you provide here:
The setting could not have been any better

than a warm overcast day.

The temp was around 80 degrees Fahrenheit.

 

I picked her up at her parents house.

She was wearing a tan high cut shorts

and a blouse that covered her mid drift.

I was wearing a white t-shirt

with a design on the front

and blue jean shorts.

 

We were both freshly bathed.

I was wearing cologne.

She smelled like Apple shampoo.

And it's admirable that you observed the local rules:

We stopped off at a convenience store

and bought non alcoholic beverages

since she was only eighteen years old

It would be interesting to find out how your experiences compare with those of other people. You certainly set the bar high --

... we made love

for one hour and forty-five minutes

-- so it's no wonder you felt like this:

I don't think we ever captured that magic

of that moment though we tried many times

many nights afterwards but the first time

was still the best ...

Even so, with these youthful memories, at least you had something to strive for. If you don't aim high, you'll never even try.

 

Tony

 

hi tony i know of a hot looking chick who said her and her hubby did it for two hours. if i didn't have the condomn on im sure the deed would have been finished in less than a half hour due to anticipation and desire etc...

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Larsen M. Callirhoe
Posted
very sexy and very romantic...

 

 

"I don't think we ever captured that magic

of that moment though we tried many times

many nights afterwards but the first time

was still the best sex we ever shared Joyce and I."

 

this stanza captures the spirit of the poem, in my opinion.

 

thank you for sharing this intimate story with us...

 

douglas my man where have you been hiding.. thanks for the lovely comments. i think you picked the stanza in my opinion that captures the essence of the moment and tone of my memories in this poem. many thanks

 

vic

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Larsen M. Callirhoe
Posted

the revised version is very graphic and detail aleks and tony. if you want i can remove the second version.

 

vic

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Posted

No need to remove, Victor. You followed the rules and put a content warning in the title. Thank you for setting a good example.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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