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Intervals of flats and depths

are irregularly spaced

but their frequency is high

to cause vibrations, for shaking

the water bottle tilted to pour,

dislocating its contents

from mouth to pants,

now wet, with its presence passing

through fabric down to skin,

even as he raises his head

while colors shifted from green to red,

the car stopping in the intersection

like water on the leather seat.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Ah, Joel, there's always the occasional mishap when one is in the driver's seat. It might not rise to the level of a fender bender, but driving while eating, drinking, talking on the phone, texting, working on PMO, and doing whatnot can have its consequences. icon_razz.gif (I do detect a hint of the erotic.) I like the way this one moves along.

 

Tony

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JJ,

 

A great ramble, it seems that the camera pans across the scene, from mutiple perspectives trapping a single continous moment into a discreet and to my eye funny moment.

 

Well done!

 

DC

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Tony and DC, I am glad that you enjoyed this poem about trivial things :-)

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Thank you, too, Alek.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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