JoelJosol Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Stepping on the weighing scale is a sanity check for me this morning after my head overflowed with sound bites, moving images and snapshots of you. I tried many self-help books on losing weight, compared the risks and gain. I agree it helps to have less of you clogging my system, that it takes time to lighten up, to remove the weight of your arms around my waist and love handles, but I will do it without looking damaged by the loss. My new year's resolution: Lose all of you this year. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 this poem was really great to read! i love the analogy employed here - it is by turns, witty, scathing, sad and victorious... enjoyed! thanks jj! Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hello Joel. Interesting poem, and the subject so familiar :) . What inspired you for this poem? Much enjoyed. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 I am actually doing weight training and wanted to use that as metaphor and vehicle for a poem. I finally did :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 The metaphor works very well, and it's totally clear by the end of the poem, the New Year's resolution, that is. Even so, there is a hint of a double meaning throughout: ... my head overflowed with sound bites, moving images and snapshots of you ... your arms around my waist ... My new year's resolution: Lose all of you this year. The poem is concise and otherwise well-written. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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