Frank E Gibbard Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 The pile of clothes On the beach left Police alerted to The puzzle curious No notes left no Clue to who left Them there it was A mystery totally Below the waves The man of the sea Smiled at his friend The dolphin clicking Amiable noises as he Sucked a sweet clam He recalled all the Turmoil back on land Goodbye to that world His eyes were now wet With lids open but Misty was natural here As he had seen above Wrongs done by people His feelings the times He first cried salt tears Had hurt so damn hard Drops of acid on his dry Face at the bitter world He preferred here where No one can see you cry Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hello Frank. This is nice and emotional poem. I like the way how is expressed this poem. All expressions and metaphors works well and the imageries as well. The ending part captures. He first cried salt tears Had hurt so damn hard Drops of acid on his dry Face at the bitter world He preferred here where No one can see you cry Thanks for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Oh, this is poignant, Frank. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 frank! i love this! it is so mystical and magical. i love the transformational aspect and the delicate philosophy which underpins the story-line. this was sensitive, evocative, visual and emotive. i enjoyed the simplicity of the structure - effective in painting the images within the verse - very balanced and well put together indeed. thank you. doug Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 the expression is solid, Gash! i could forbid the man not to say Goodbye! i think, that's why the poem is successful that it can drive a reader! RoNy Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 This is a lyrical treasure, Frank. It's very moving, and it's certainly one of your best. A perfect poem -- I'm reading it over and over. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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