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Goodbye to the World


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Frank E Gibbard

The pile of clothes

 

On the beach left

 

Police alerted to

 

The puzzle curious

 

No notes left no

 

Clue to who left

 

Them there it was

 

A mystery totally

 

Below the waves

 

The man of the sea

 

Smiled at his friend

 

The dolphin clicking

 

Amiable noises as he

 

Sucked a sweet clam

 

He recalled all the

 

Turmoil back on land

 

Goodbye to that world

 

His eyes were now wet

 

With lids open but

 

Misty was natural here

 

As he had seen above

 

Wrongs done by people

 

His feelings the times

 

He first cried salt tears

 

Had hurt so damn hard

 

Drops of acid on his dry

 

Face at the bitter world

 

He preferred here where

 

No one can see you cry

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Aleksandra

Hello Frank. This is nice and emotional poem. I like the way how is expressed this poem. All expressions and metaphors works well and the imageries as well.

 

The ending part captures.

 

He first cried salt tears

 

Had hurt so damn hard

 

Drops of acid on his dry

 

Face at the bitter world

 

He preferred here where

 

No one can see you cry

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Oh, this is poignant, Frank.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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frank! i love this! it is so mystical and magical. i love the transformational aspect and the delicate philosophy which underpins the story-line. this was sensitive, evocative, visual and emotive. i enjoyed the simplicity of the structure - effective in painting the images within the verse - very balanced and well put together indeed.

 

thank you.

 

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the expression is solid, Gash! i could forbid the man not to say Goodbye!

 

 

i think, that's why the poem is successful that it can drive a reader!

 

RoNy

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This is a lyrical treasure, Frank. It's very moving, and it's certainly one of your best. A perfect poem -- I'm reading it over and over.

 

Tony

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