Tinker Posted August 5, 2019 Share Posted August 5, 2019 For TrinityFresh gusts of scented air traversethe satin curve of sun-blushed cheeks.A love caress in nature’s verse,a silent, timeless vow it speaks.Your beauty blossoms from within;unselfish acts are sure to winesteem from those who watch from afaryour trek to catch the promised star. ~~Judi Van Gorder Verse Form: Rispetto Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 7, 2019 Share Posted August 7, 2019 I love dedicated works, Judi. This is a lovely one with impeccable meter. I would change one small thing; I would use a semicolon or a full stop at the end of L5 after "within." Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted August 8, 2019 Author Share Posted August 8, 2019 I think you are right Tony. Will fix it. Glad you like it. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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