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Hey!

Look into my eyes

Watch how a heart deprives

And cries for the love

For which a life lives

 

Staring at your smile

Became not only the joy

But also something I don’t know

 

Love is not so easy

Just like the celebration with

The candle-light dinner

Or like the funny act to

Cease your anger

Or like the whole night talk

In phone using the cheapest operator

 

But it’s something else

Like the sleeps lost forever

Remembering your face

Or like losing my rhythms in guitar

While watching you walk

Or feel like the spark

While my name you suddenly call

 

Beyond definition

Beyond intuition

This is the feelings for which

I want to pass my rest

I know I am nothing without

You, I won’t be best

 

So please take the insurance premium

And save my job

You are the target to fulfill

And at least give me a hope!

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Aleksandra

Bloodyday, nice to see you around and with new poems ;). Next time when you post a poem, post it after your comments so your poem won't be pushed down by you :). You worked so much and with that you made me to work now also :), because I couldn't leave your poem at the bottom, or to miss some poem to comment on icon_razz.gif

 

Back to the poem. I like this one Rony. It is so well written and have some interesting tone.

I love the beginning. It is so special and informative, and goes good with your interesting tittle:

 

Hey!

Look into my eyes

Watch how a heart deprives

And cries for the love

For which a life lives

 

Staring at your smile

Became not only the joy

But also something I don’t know

 

Much enjoyed Rony.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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The heart aches. It is written clearly stanza after stanza.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Hey! Rony! It is definitely an emotionally charged poem, no doubt. I wonder if it'll take anything away if "Hey!" is removed. Because I thought "Hey" sounds pretty casual, but hey, that's your style. icon_biggrin.png

 

There are lots of new things in your poem, words like "using the cheapest operator", "take the insurance premium" etc really inject some freshness in the content of your poem. I really like it.

 

Lake

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thanks everybody! now-a-days i couldn't have much time to sit in a chair for couple of minutes though my works is not laborious but i think i am familiar with jack of all trade so much! 236907.gif

 

i have made up myself while i was in a boring meeting. a presentation was not so successful and my boss was thinking about my position. but when i cooked up this poem, it made me happy!

 

Thanks everybody: Alek, Lake, Joel! I think Joel needs Dr_con for his aches! lol.gif

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Rony, I love this poem, especially these parts:

Staring at your smile

Became not only the joy

But also something I don’t know

 

Love is not so easy

Just like the celebration with

The candle-light dinner

Or like the funny act to

Cease your anger

Or like the whole night talk

In phone using the cheapest operator

 

But it’s something else

Like the sleeps lost forever

Remembering your face

Or like losing my rhythms in guitar

While watching you walk

Or feel like the spark

While my name you suddenly call ...

 

I know I am nothing without

You ...

Reading them is like listening to my favorite vocal trance mixes.

 

Tony icon_smile.gif

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Hmm...and i loved the music of you tube and thanks for your comment!

 

if anyone want to chat, then please add me:

1) reichstag_bond@yahoo.com

2) nt_eee@yahoo.com

 

i am passing most of the time in chat roooms! what should i do, dude? i need to pass my times!

 

thanks again!

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