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The moon is full at 5:30

air crisp, cold belated rain

and everything is confused

misplaced, seconds pool

in the air

 

____and my freshly washed hair

I believe that the spiritually inclined

make the best addicts, they need grammar

to remain in the earth narrative

without that smoke or drink________________or fix

why bother with linearity

at all: clean shaven dressers,

secretly jealous

 

invested in the pragmatic minute

they cannot abide the hour

with its inevitability

and the implicit

 

threat of undoing

everything dear

 

Now, before work, I am having problems

with the reasons for this man

beneath a street light

a little cold

 

remembering past instances of chill

while waiting for a door to open up

through the ether or just a city bus

once again submitting

to the expectations

and safety

of expected

 

habits of the ordinary.

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nice- I really like the uneven pace (lines per stanza)- feels like starts and stops- something like the feel of the subject would be...

 

this bit, very cool image:

everything is confused

misplaced, seconds pool

in the air

 

and this is the best part for me:

 

 

I believe that the spiritually inclined

make the best addicts, they need grammar

to remain in the earth narrative

 

and then more "time" references:

 

invested in the pragmatic minute

they cannot abide the hour

with its inevitability

and the implicit

 

and then Time again referenced as past and future:

 

remembering past instances of chill

while waiting for a door to open up

 

which for me, the essence of time is summed up perfectly with the last line

 

habits of the ordinary.

 

this time theme that Im seeing run through it, has a perfect irony with the title - after all, time is money icon_smile.gif

 

nice dc

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The poem is top shelf, but work itself is definitely overrated:

Now, before work, I am having problems

with the reasons for this man

beneath a street light

a little cold ...

They say, "Do what you love, and you will be successful," but it's too bad that most of the stuff that pays isn't really so pleasant. I myself prefer to not think about those past instances of chill/while waiting for a door to open up.

 

The first stanza, its stanza break, and the first line of the second stanza move me, and I appreciate the allusion in the last line. I agree with Rumisong about its effectiveness.

 

Tony

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In these times, the probability is high for this

 

threat of undoing

everything dear

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Aleksandra

Interesting and non usual poem Dr.con. I agree with Tony for this poem. The imagery at the beginning works very well to introduce to us the rest of the poem. It remind me of few night ago, while I watched the full moon hanging like the light in the night.

 

Thank you for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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Thanks All! I have been dealing with edits for my book of poetry and feeling overwhelmed by the global/spiritual collapse...

 

Much Love and Grace!

 

DC

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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