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JoelJosol
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This blank paper

is my report

 

about the poem

I meant to write.

 

I laid off words

when thoughts defaulted,

 

sans attachment-

very clinical, precise-

 

to keep the piece afloat

in this difficult time.

 

But, I failed to live

within my means

 

and so the rest

had to go.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Oh yes, some of my fav poems are poems on the 'inability to write poems' and this certainly did not disappoint! icon_biggrin.png

 

Well constructed, nice internal rhythm, and an inspiration for getting out of that 'can't write' Que;-)

 

 

DC

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Thank you, DC and Tony. Yeah, I forced myself to use a metaphor that described my state of mind :-)

 

I edited to include "so" in the last couplet.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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wonderful brevity, angst and emotion within these words. i love the stark structure of the stanzas, the bleak, yet charged words and the passion that is palpable.

 

well written, thank you! icon_smile.gif

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Aleksandra

Joel, I love this poem. It is wonderful written. Blank paper works properly. This poem talks a lot and express exactly, the state of mind - as you said.

 

Thank you for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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Thanks, douglas and Alek. Nowadays, I am so swamped by work I am running out of creative juice :-)

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Hi

 

nice poem in short but said all what it should say. the construction and rhythm between the lines attract and has the ability to drive a mind to know more about what next!

 

RoNy

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Thanks, Rony.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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