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JoelJosol
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You probably know

what an emptied seat means.

How blinking an eye could miss

the minute changes in the shadows,

and be burdened by what seemed

to be a desertion.

 

I am still here but yes I've changed

my seats, desiring a viewpoint

on how I can look at things, or you

not with loss of interest, no,

but with never ending wonder

of how you remained the same

 

despite the alterations

of the visible.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Aleksandra

This is amazing part Joel:

 

How blinking an eye could miss

the minute changes in the shadows,

 

... so meaningful and with brilliant effect.

The seats metaphor - works perfectly.

 

The end is full of wisdom:

I am still here but yes I've changed

my seats, desiring a viewpoint

on how I can look at things, or you

not with loss of interest, no,

but with never ending wonder

of how you remained the same

 

despite the alterations

of the visible

 

I love this lovely poem Joel. I can't stop reading it.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Thank you so much, Alek.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Aleksandra wrote:

 

I love this lovely poem Joel. I can't stop reading it.

 

yes, I find myself coming back to reread it too - it is very lovely...

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Agree with Alek and Rum. Lovely (love) poem. I like the conversational tone imbued with wonder and thoughts. Well crafted, too.

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All I can do is agree with all of the above comments. The specific details enhance the rumination making it a lovely treasure to behold.

 

DC

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Tony, you are right. I had the 14-line sonnet in mind and the last two lines as the typical ending.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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