JoelJosol Posted May 21, 2009 Posted May 21, 2009 You probably know what an emptied seat means. How blinking an eye could miss the minute changes in the shadows, and be burdened by what seemed to be a desertion. I am still here but yes I've changed my seats, desiring a viewpoint on how I can look at things, or you not with loss of interest, no, but with never ending wonder of how you remained the same despite the alterations of the visible. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
Aleksandra Posted May 21, 2009 Posted May 21, 2009 This is amazing part Joel: How blinking an eye could miss the minute changes in the shadows, ... so meaningful and with brilliant effect. The seats metaphor - works perfectly. The end is full of wisdom: I am still here but yes I've changed my seats, desiring a viewpoint on how I can look at things, or you not with loss of interest, no, but with never ending wonder of how you remained the same despite the alterations of the visible I love this lovely poem Joel. I can't stop reading it. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia
JoelJosol Posted May 21, 2009 Author Posted May 21, 2009 Thank you so much, Alek. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
rumisong Posted May 21, 2009 Posted May 21, 2009 Aleksandra wrote: I love this lovely poem Joel. I can't stop reading it. yes, I find myself coming back to reread it too - it is very lovely... Quote
Lake Posted May 21, 2009 Posted May 21, 2009 Agree with Alek and Rum. Lovely (love) poem. I like the conversational tone imbued with wonder and thoughts. Well crafted, too. Quote
dr_con Posted May 21, 2009 Posted May 21, 2009 All I can do is agree with all of the above comments. The specific details enhance the rumination making it a lovely treasure to behold. DC Quote thegateless.org
tonyv Posted May 21, 2009 Posted May 21, 2009 I agree with the others, Joel. This is another lovely lyric of yours that I would (again) characterize as a contemporary sonnet. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
JoelJosol Posted May 21, 2009 Author Posted May 21, 2009 Tony, you are right. I had the 14-line sonnet in mind and the last two lines as the typical ending. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
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