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14 Years Later


douglas
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a heart

torn open when i think of you

 

what

caused your heart to be so untrue?

 

aiming for the present

i try to remain in today

 

you are pulling at me from the past

and i'm trying to create some distance

but

your memory moves too fast

 

just when my feelings are all buttoned up

and washed

and cleaned

and starched

you seep back into

my soul

my mind

wrentching it all apart

 

but

here's the funny truth

i'm doing it all to myself

 

i'm weighed down with things

that could have been

and beautiful moments that have passed

 

and i know i'll never taste again

a flavour

as unique as you

and so i desperately try to savour

these fading images

like a fool

 

it's then that i remember

i'm in a place

called the here and now

 

if i'm to survive

and find love again

i'm going to have to let go

of this pain

 

it's time

to reconcile

thoughts and passions

 

from fears and melancholy to depart

 

there's nothing else left

for me to do or say

but gather up my heart.

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Aleksandra

Ah Doug, how wonderful passionate poem. Emotional and lovely. I loved this one too.

The way of expression of past love, gives some deep feelings. The power of that love, seems left over the narrator a real deep feelings, so even after many years, the memories are still here. And yes the time can help sometimes, when there would be another love... But who can be sure, that even then, the ghosts from the past will stop showing up, still? icon_smile.gif

 

Douglas, the poem is wonderful. I love the sensitive body in this poem.

 

Well done icon_wink.gif

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Welcome, Douglas! icon_biggrin.png I'm pleased that you're here. I agree with Alek.

 

And I think this part is especially striking:

and i know i'll never taste again

a flavour

as unique as you

Fourteen years is a long time, but that's the way it is with past loves.

 

Tony icon_smile.gif

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thank you both for your insightful and kind comments! yes, this person has been hard to get out of my system - but i have chosen to rather just embrace the feelings now and use them in my creativity, instead of feeling low about the emotions!

 

it is good to be here with you guys! i have been so busy and a little all over the place this year as i have just moved from south africa to autralia. so, hopefully now i will be able to settle into a new rhythm and routine!

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goldenlangur

Hello Douglas,

 

 

This is quite a wrenching poem. How eloquently you grieve the end of a relationship, which seems to have caused immense suffering, a loss of the sense of the self and then the betrayal. You describe movingly how painful it is to believe in oneself and make a new start after such an experience:

 

i know i'll never taste again

a flavour

as unique as you

and so i desperately try to savour

these fading images

like a fool

 

 

The honesty with which you write is admirable.

 

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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dearest goldenlangur,

 

it is so lovely to hear from you after all these months. and thank you so very much for your empathic and complimentary words. as always, your opinion and comments are extremely appreciated.

 

douglas

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

what a masterpiece douglas. i enjoyed reading this immensely. what a treat it was to. great eye candy. i love the emotions drawn into the poem. the metaphors work so well/ i would pick out a favorite stanza but i love the whole poem. i know where i live not of my past mloves will find me. i do have storys posted on the internert in my full name not the pen name i use here and they could easily get my email address but my ghosts from the past want me dead lol. love is so complicated and overrated these days,

 

larsen aka vic

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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dearest larsen, thank you for your high praise! i am so happy that this piece touched you and that you relate your own story through it - that's wonderful! icon_biggrin.png

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