douglas Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 a heart torn open when i think of you what caused your heart to be so untrue? aiming for the present i try to remain in today you are pulling at me from the past and i'm trying to create some distance but your memory moves too fast just when my feelings are all buttoned up and washed and cleaned and starched you seep back into my soul my mind wrentching it all apart but here's the funny truth i'm doing it all to myself i'm weighed down with things that could have been and beautiful moments that have passed and i know i'll never taste again a flavour as unique as you and so i desperately try to savour these fading images like a fool it's then that i remember i'm in a place called the here and now if i'm to survive and find love again i'm going to have to let go of this pain it's time to reconcile thoughts and passions from fears and melancholy to depart there's nothing else left for me to do or say but gather up my heart. Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Ah Doug, how wonderful passionate poem. Emotional and lovely. I loved this one too. The way of expression of past love, gives some deep feelings. The power of that love, seems left over the narrator a real deep feelings, so even after many years, the memories are still here. And yes the time can help sometimes, when there would be another love... But who can be sure, that even then, the ghosts from the past will stop showing up, still? Douglas, the poem is wonderful. I love the sensitive body in this poem. Well done Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Welcome, Douglas! I'm pleased that you're here. I agree with Alek. And I think this part is especially striking: and i know i'll never taste again a flavour as unique as you Fourteen years is a long time, but that's the way it is with past loves. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 21, 2009 Author Share Posted May 21, 2009 thank you both for your insightful and kind comments! yes, this person has been hard to get out of my system - but i have chosen to rather just embrace the feelings now and use them in my creativity, instead of feeling low about the emotions! it is good to be here with you guys! i have been so busy and a little all over the place this year as i have just moved from south africa to autralia. so, hopefully now i will be able to settle into a new rhythm and routine! Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Hello Douglas, This is quite a wrenching poem. How eloquently you grieve the end of a relationship, which seems to have caused immense suffering, a loss of the sense of the self and then the betrayal. You describe movingly how painful it is to believe in oneself and make a new start after such an experience: i know i'll never taste again a flavour as unique as you and so i desperately try to savour these fading images like a fool The honesty with which you write is admirable. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 21, 2009 Author Share Posted May 21, 2009 dearest goldenlangur, it is so lovely to hear from you after all these months. and thank you so very much for your empathic and complimentary words. as always, your opinion and comments are extremely appreciated. douglas Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 what a masterpiece douglas. i enjoyed reading this immensely. what a treat it was to. great eye candy. i love the emotions drawn into the poem. the metaphors work so well/ i would pick out a favorite stanza but i love the whole poem. i know where i live not of my past mloves will find me. i do have storys posted on the internert in my full name not the pen name i use here and they could easily get my email address but my ghosts from the past want me dead lol. love is so complicated and overrated these days, larsen aka vic Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 21, 2009 Author Share Posted May 21, 2009 dearest larsen, thank you for your high praise! i am so happy that this piece touched you and that you relate your own story through it - that's wonderful! Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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