dcmarti1 Posted October 14, 2019 Share Posted October 14, 2019 In a yard fenced in by rotten chain links, With a rotten water heater standing sentry Over a just as rotten picnic table, 1903 and 1964 together crack walnuts To be oven roasted for the squirrels. They are asked, “Why all the fuss for squirrels?” Flat is the reply, “Because it's cold.” Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 14, 2019 Share Posted October 14, 2019 I, myself, love squirrels. Around here, we have the gray ones. In Toronto I saw black ones! I like how you refer to the participants by their years of birth. It even helps the reader picture their respective generations. Clearly the poem takes place in the past. Otherwise, "1903" would be 116 years old! And I do love their response: "Because it's cold." Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted October 14, 2019 Author Share Posted October 14, 2019 1 hour ago, tonyv said: I, myself, love squirrels. Around here, we have the gray ones. In Toronto I saw black ones! I like how you refer to the participants by their years of birth. It even helps the reader picture their respective generations. Clearly the poem takes place in the past. Otherwise, "1903" would be 116 years old! And I do love their response: "Because it's cold." Tony I did not want to say "grandfather" and "grandson". This did happen, and it happened to me in like 1970, 1971. It was sometime after the moon landing in 1969, hence "the great leap". Thanks, Tony! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted October 20, 2019 Share Posted October 20, 2019 Marti, The images in the yard, the rusted out old water heater in the yard, the rotting picnic table the chain link fence are so clear. I didn't understand the 1902 and 1964 until now and now everything makes sense. I hear the response of grandfather and grandson in unison. What an awesome memory of your grandfather and I love that you were so in sync with him on this. I like you more every time I read one of your poems. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted November 22, 2019 Share Posted November 22, 2019 Yes indeed Marti! Thought this should be bumped up;-) The image was clear as a bell, I felt the cold, saw the squirrels and pictured the time. nice. Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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