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Friday

 

Far away someone screams to his God.

The sun is off to neverland today.

Prayers ripple through the vast void

of time and settle at the bottom.

 

You are distant

like the priest who knows not what he wants;

and sleep runs like a disease through my nights.

 

* Friday is a sacred day in Islam. A day for special prayers. Its like Sunday is for christians.

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Wow, Awe-sum-mayya!

 

Paints a clear picture, with surrealist images, that are at once simple observations and incredible well chosen complex images:

 

and sleep runs like a disease through my nights

 

As an example, simply astounding.

 

I do not think it is necessary to point out the significance of Friday, of course that's just my opinion, but one either knows, doesn't but is swept away anyhow, or the enviable third option, which one finds out and some time later the poem completes itself in the reader- "oh that's why it was Friday" icon_eek.gif

 

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Much Grace,

 

DC

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I like how Far off is offset by You are distant, which, together with the priest who knows not what he wants, is very Hopkins-esque. Of course, as has already been noted, the last line is quite potent.

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Thanks DC and tony. Your comments and suggestions are always percpetive and much appreciated.

 

Much thanks!

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Aleksandra

Wonderful poem Summayya, as a screaming in silence. The metaphor with the priest, works perfectly.

 

I love this poem.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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