Liz Mastin Posted October 21, 2019 Share Posted October 21, 2019 The sun inclines the waves to glow Across my turquoise ocean view; The sea alive with ropes of gold. The storms of yesterday have flown. The skies take on a brilliant hue. The sun inclines the waves to glow. Now soaring seagulls (circling) go The way they did when life was new; The sea alive with ropes of gold. It was the time when mankind strolled In Eden's lovely habitude. The sun inclines the waves to glow. But Adam's tempted heart grew cold And entertained ingratitude; The sea alive with ropes of gold. As breakers wash the white-sand shore, I share with you my seaside muse: The sun inclines the waves to glow; The sea alive with ropes of gold. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted October 22, 2019 Share Posted October 22, 2019 Hi Liz, This is a lovely Villanelle. The limited rhyme didn't give you any trouble, nice use of near rhyme. The image "ropes of gold" is unique and beautiful. Nice way to introduce yourself to the members. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted October 25, 2019 Share Posted October 25, 2019 this is lovely Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Liz Mastin Posted October 25, 2019 Author Share Posted October 25, 2019 Thank you, eclipse. I'm glad you enjoyed it! I enjoy Villanelles and would encourage others to choose to write them. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 27, 2019 Share Posted October 27, 2019 Liz, this is beautifully composed. And I do like how it blames Adam but makes no mention of Eve. Altogether, very nice work. Tony 😀 Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Liz Mastin Posted October 28, 2019 Author Share Posted October 28, 2019 6 hours ago, tonyv said: Liz, this is beautifully composed. And I do like how it blames Adam but makes no mention of Eve. Altogether, very nice work. Tony 😀 I'm so glad you like it Tony! It was my view in CanCun, Mexico. Eve shouldn't have allowed herself to be influenced by the serpent! And then Adam (actually) was only trusting "her". Yet, they both had been warned! So, Who did they believe? God, or hearsay? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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