dr_con Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Ghost Stories I am ill equipped to deal with Ghosts The Ancestors who are moving tables upstairs in this lonely house are not the problem, they are simply pointing to actions which will please the dead I Have dealt with the Circle of Spirits their attention captured by our fumbling into their land, naked & surprised, we make peace or find ourselves eaten, often with the same results And the Hungry we have inherited offer many challenges, gnawing at the walls of the 4 Divine Abodes celebrating the Poisons and their needs always wanting more & more Outside of this campfire moment beyond the glow of home the world is muttering the elusive chains of freedom are rattling there is the Great Wailing "Loss of Livelihood, Shattered Safeties" With the inability to pay for the past the lies of power crumble across the globe forms dissolve Truth naught but a Shade reaching for unprepared Hearts. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Dr. Con, So am I ill equipped to read this Ghost Stories. I feel there are lots of references in this that need to be checked up for a better understanding and those upper case words which I'm sure carry some underlying meanings. All in all, it does have a ghost, mysterious feel, and a feel of uneasiness. Thanks for this profound reading. Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 I find these parts to be especially striking -- I am ill equipped to deal with Ghosts The Ancestors who are moving tables upstairs in this empty house are not the problem ... Outside of this campfire moment beyond the glow of home the world is muttering the elusive chains of freedom are rattling ... The only small objection I have is to the word empty; I would probably omit that. If the house is empty, there would be no table. (I'm sure you mean empty of other people, but even taken in that context, the word makes me stumble.) Perhaps another word or phrase or omitting it altogether (and leaving just this house) would work better. In the end it becomes clear that the narrator's personal misgivings are part of a macrocosm. This is a great metaphor for the collapse -- "interdependence" at its worst. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 21, 2009 Author Share Posted May 21, 2009 Lake & Tony, Many Thanks for your input. Tony, I have edited- finding a more suitable image perhaps... Lake, I really feel, that your self doubt is unjustified, (In my opinion and in my reading of your comments, which could be as wildly incorrect, as ANY interpretation of a poem, including my own view ) You have a keen eye, my Capitalization is a technique, which sometimes works and sometimes doesn't... When I first started writing critical essays, they were filled with random capitals, my grammarian friends would go mad, but those who would allow the writing to just flow would occasionally compliment me on their use. We capitalize proper names, saying they are more than just common nouns/objects, but all objects in a postmodern sense, are more than simply objects, and it changes the dynamic of the piece to emphasize something like the Moon or a Spoon, instead of the moon or just another spoon... @ least that's my sensibility The hints @ depth, are just that- I just found the 4 Divine Abodes in a friends article on Buddhism... They are self evident: Love, Joy, Compassion and equanimity--- But, divine abodes is so much more resonant and well frankly, deeper... So, the reaction is why those word choices, the feeling that their is something more, and isn't there always/ ;-) Many Thanks and much Gratitude for your comments! Dr. Con Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 I like it, Dr. C! Lonely works swimmingly. I was trying to think of other adjectives but had not thought of that one. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
summayya Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 I am ill equipped to deal with Ghosts The Ancestors who are moving tables upstairs in this lonely house are not the problem,... Outside of this campfire moment beyond the glow of home the world is muttering the elusive chains of freedom are rattling there is the Great Wailing "Loss of Livelihood, Shattered Safeties" Somehow this reminds me of Yeats: Mere anarchy is loosed upon the world, The blood-dimmed tide is loosed, and everywhere The ceremony of innocence is drowned; The best lack all conviction, while the worst Are full of passionate intensity. And the associations on the the personal and the universal level.... Really enjoying your work. And lonely is better word choice indeed. Also I didn't know bout the reference to the Divine Abodes.Thanks for helping me out there or else I would have googled it...or perhaps I would..to know more about it. Many thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Wonderful, and very quality poem. The unique sense of your poems captures Dr.Con. I loved this one. I love the usage of the positive mind states. And yours Capitalization technique works a lot. Thank you for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tilsover Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Con - sharp and bold as ever. I'm seeing in this poem parallels, if not the outright story of the current events happening in this country right now. Seems descriptive of economic woes and bailout mess. --til Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 21, 2009 Author Share Posted May 21, 2009 til, Aleks and Summ- Many, Many Thanks for your thoughtful responses- Soemtimes, I don't always respond right away, because I don't want to hog the top of the page, but know that every comment is felt and savored! Much Appreciation, DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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