JTParreira Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Angelic step in air falls on the carpet I was very good at it cause problems to the sensitive Hollywood I do it exceptionally well was stupid say acting is not work to hard-boiled male so after much knock out my memory have a long space. J.T.Parreira 02/23/2009 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 This concise piece is top-rate. I wouldn't add to it or omit anything; every word and expression belongs. I especially like how it's written in the first person, the "hard-boiled male" expression, and the last line. I'd say it's one of your best. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Interesting poem, inspired by a movie, Joao. I like always, how you are dealing with these kinds of poems, dedicated in which you talk as Tony says, in first person. That gives interesting touch and sense of your style. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JTParreira Posted May 21, 2009 Author Share Posted May 21, 2009 Thanks Alek e Tony for your words. This poem is the result of my sympathy for Mickey. One man against establishment. An anti-hero. Joao Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 21, 2009 Share Posted May 21, 2009 Fascinating. the poem lumbers, and yet is concise in its first person awkwardness- Beautiful! An antihero, deserving of aredemption. Well, well done! DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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