tonyv Posted January 1, 2020 Posted January 1, 2020 The best our planet has to give, reduced to condiments -- I'm honey on her lips, she's spent sangria in my wasted veins. She's too long by my side. Our way to heaven will always be our bodies, not our minds. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
dr_con Posted January 2, 2020 Posted January 2, 2020 This induced a chuckle, a pause and quite a stirring of admiration -- I can't believe the successful use of 'condiments' the erotic resolution of the kantian mind/body dualism and its just plain fun!!! 😉 Quote thegateless.org
Tinker Posted January 3, 2020 Posted January 3, 2020 Ditto, this is a spicy little morsel. Nice Tony.  ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
badger11 Posted January 6, 2020 Posted January 6, 2020 Â hi Tony The title suggests looking back at being self-absorbed. The body of the poem speaks of sensual indulgence with another. The use of 'reduced'Â and 'condiments' conveys a state of being that is diminished. There is a weariness with the pleasures of honey/sangria perhaps - that word wasted. The concluding line returns to advocating sensual rather than spiritual life and I'm thinking more about her in the poem. Quote She's too long by my side. In that context, not weariness, but wanting more than friendship. Fulfilment in earthly experience. best Phil Quote
tonyv Posted January 7, 2020 Author Posted January 7, 2020 On 1/2/2020 at 3:26 PM, dr_con said: This induced a chuckle, a pause and quite a stirring of admiration -- I can't believe the successful use of 'condiments' the erotic resolution of the kantian mind/body dualism and its just plain fun!!! 😉 Thank you, Juris. It's a fine word! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
tonyv Posted January 7, 2020 Author Posted January 7, 2020 On 1/3/2020 at 5:51 PM, Tinker said: Ditto, this is a spicy little morsel. Nice Tony.  ~~Judi And thank you, Judi! Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
tonyv Posted January 7, 2020 Author Posted January 7, 2020 Phil, thank you for on-point analysis. 17 hours ago, badger11 said: The title suggests looking back at being self-absorbed. The body of the poem speaks of sensual indulgence with another. The use of 'reduced' and 'condiments' conveys a state of being that is diminished. There is a weariness with the pleasures of honey/sangria perhaps - that word wasted. The concluding line returns to advocating sensual rather than spiritual life and I'm thinking more about her in the poem. This is right in line with my expectations. I had hoped to convey a sense of paradox with the title, the "looking back," but has anything changed? Will it change? Can it even change? I would suggest that the weariness isn't just from consumption or even from the year, rather it's from a decade, perhaps a wasted one. 17 hours ago, badger11 said: In that context, not weariness, but wanting more than friendship. I'm leaning toward friendship, more, all of it, and none of it. There's that weariness again. With appreciation, Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
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