dr_con Posted January 6, 2020 Share Posted January 6, 2020 Scrape 1.5.2020 Time to address the Scratch In the room an Itch where Skin meets environment it may be suppressed It may be held back by evolutionary kindness still it is There or Here holding us in its Embrace an urge to explore the born-boundary wonder why we end in the derma why the itch is not of us and yet if it isOther somehow not subjective but Objective Exogenous a violation from outside which will only be satisfied by a scritch scritch scrape a divine intervention an erotic OOOO and a that’s right and now you’re getting it Do I dare say a Oneness? a dissolution of It and me an ecstatic return to the We There now Does that feel better? Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 7, 2020 Share Posted January 7, 2020 I always scratch the itch. I lack the patience and self-control for anything less. And I'm not waiting for the pizza to cool either. If I burn my mouth and I'm left with third degree burns on my chin and face it's worth it. I like how the poem heightens in intensity, especially after the second stanza. This is very well put together from start to finish. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted January 17, 2020 Share Posted January 17, 2020 Juris, I found myself tensing as I read this. Yes you got it. You are a master at transferring feelings to the reader. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A. Baez Posted January 18, 2020 Share Posted January 18, 2020 Oh my gosh, how novel! The scratch or itch as archetype of humans' sense of ego-separation from the rest of creation vis-à-vis the delusive body vehicle! I find this topic, and your exploration of it, fascinating. I love your droll title, with its dual connotations of a "scratch" and a "difficult situation." Your poem confronts both. "Time to address"--nice start. This issue clearly has been bugging you for awhile--time to face it head on! Quote why we end in the derma why the itch is not of us Why, indeed? From the outset, you seem to mix things up by using the terms "scratch," "scritch," "scrape," and "itch" interchangeably to mean any one of three things: a scratch from without, an itch from within, and a scratch from, well, somewhere between without and within (i.e., the person's hand). While all this does reinforce your exploration of boundaries, at times it does not feel intentional and just leaves me confused. If any of these verbal mixups are intentional, I guess I'd like to get a clearer sense of this--perhaps by your introducing the fluidity gradually, after we've had a chance to get our bearings as readers with some clearly defined and used terms. "Erotic 0000" is an allusion that escapes me. ? Quote Do I dare say a Oneness? a dissolution of It and me an ecstatic return to the We This is hilarious! I never knew an itch could be so sublimely profound! And yet, in essence, it is. Quote There now Does that feel better? Ha! This stock line here gains an entirely broader significance in light of the metaphysical exploration that has preceded. You present deeply serious questions with a ticklingly funny approach. Overall, a highly innovative and successful work. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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