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Never Wrote
2.16.20 con/jur/d

There was something
some-thing to be said
Said ‘stopped writing’
writing love-letters my
My letters were never 
never-understood what
what wasn’t wrote

wrote before
before accepting
accepting a poem
a poem is composed
is composed by the whole
The Whole Body of Breath
breath and beating alchemy
Alchemy catalyzed will never
never-ever explain how

You knew
you knew

How you knew what was never
what was never wrote 
never there

always Here.
 

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9 hours ago, Tinker said:

Now this touches me more than "how do I love thee, let me count the ways"

3 hours ago, badger11 said:

the poem does connect emotionally, especially the immediacy

^ How much I agree with these! A perfect poem: Start | fromcontent2form | Finish. I loved it.

Tony

PS: The title is right there, too. (But I already said that; it falls under Start.)

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Thank You all! Was working on trimming a collaborative piece and this 'popped' out. I saw a Creeley poem that partially inspired this Badge and yes beating alchemy did have a black mountain resonance (although I have no idea why;-) But since, in a sense, this piece is about reading outside of the text, then I would say you successfully navigated my intention by picking up the influences in the ether, rather than what was written as the text;-)

 

Much Appreciation All

 

J

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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First of all, I'm a fan of your title pun "con/jur/d"! Next, hmm, what an interesting format of passing a word from the end of one line to the beginning of the next, conveying a sense of stuttering and hence of psychological uncertainty, of slight dislocation, and yet of things slowly building upon each other--which the theme only enhances. 

As usual, a few questions: Why the dash between "some" and "thing" in the second line? Why "wrote" instead of "written"? I'm also wondering who's doing the accepting of the poem? The poet? A publisher?

Favorite lines:

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is composed by the whole
The Whole Body of Breath
breath and beating alchemy

Now that feels downright Romantic!

I also like the way the pattern breaks down at the end without dissolving completely.

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You knew
you knew

How you knew what was never
what was never wrote 
never there

always Here.

 

I get such a visceral sense of interpersonal confrontation; of realization, of incredulity. I love being made to feel as if at the center of your awakening awareness. Despite my few questions, I was quite gripped by your poem. 

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