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Have you seen love?


JoelJosol
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Is it something

we can speak about

 

or pass over

in silence?

 

Is it warm like a poem

on paper

 

lying on the pavement

at noon?

 

Can it be contained

in a bottle

 

and instructed

how to spring from it?

 

Can it be measured

like a meter

 

in rhythmic pulses

along a line?

 

If I say

'I love you',

 

is there a picture

in your mind?

 

Is it the same

as mine?

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

we all contemplate like that. thanks for the glimpse into your mind. interesting journey.

 

larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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You just keep getting better and better Joel. Nice, clear rumination on Love, well, well done;-)

 

DC

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I agree with the others, Joel. I would add that I can really appreciate this part:

Can it be measured

like a meter

 

in rhythmic pulses

along a line?

icon_biggrin.png And, of course, there's the lovely ending in which you convey the narrator's uncertainty very well:

If I say

'I love you',

 

is there a picture

in your mind?

 

Is it the same

as mine?

It feels like the excitement of a new and budding love.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Thanks for your positive feedback - rumisong, larsen, DrC, and tony.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Aleksandra

Wonderful poem. Clear, lyrical, lovely.

I love this poem JJ

 

Thank you for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Thank you, douglas and Aleks. I wrote this poem for my friends who will miss me as I go up the mountains last two weeks.

 

This one is not really so much about love but applying the Wittgenstein's thought process on the poem. If you are familiar with him, the lines would come out as near direct allusions.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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If I say

'I love you',

 

is there a picture

in your mind?

 

Is it the same

as mine?

 

a perfect masterpiece just stole my time like a blinking of my eyes. Just a perfect poem to collect and to read!

 

excellent!

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