JoelJosol Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Is it something we can speak about or pass over in silence? Is it warm like a poem on paper lying on the pavement at noon? Can it be contained in a bottle and instructed how to spring from it? Can it be measured like a meter in rhythmic pulses along a line? If I say 'I love you', is there a picture in your mind? Is it the same as mine? Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 I like everything about this- perfect! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 we all contemplate like that. thanks for the glimpse into your mind. interesting journey. larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 You just keep getting better and better Joel. Nice, clear rumination on Love, well, well done;-) DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 I agree with the others, Joel. I would add that I can really appreciate this part: Can it be measured like a meter in rhythmic pulses along a line? And, of course, there's the lovely ending in which you convey the narrator's uncertainty very well: If I say 'I love you', is there a picture in your mind? Is it the same as mine? It feels like the excitement of a new and budding love. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 Thanks for your positive feedback - rumisong, larsen, DrC, and tony. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 very gentle and beautiful. thanks for sharing jj. Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Wonderful poem. Clear, lyrical, lovely. I love this poem JJ Thank you for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 Thank you, douglas and Aleks. I wrote this poem for my friends who will miss me as I go up the mountains last two weeks. This one is not really so much about love but applying the Wittgenstein's thought process on the poem. If you are familiar with him, the lines would come out as near direct allusions. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Enjoyed the poem, though would never have thought of Wittgenstein. badge :0) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 If I say 'I love you', is there a picture in your mind? Is it the same as mine? a perfect masterpiece just stole my time like a blinking of my eyes. Just a perfect poem to collect and to read! excellent! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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