rumisong Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 when I tell you that I am a sufi why do you want so badly to believe that its true? when I tell you that Im a mystic why does your eyebrow raise up? when I tell you that Im a tree why does your finger begin to reach for a book of names and addresses? when I tell you that I love you why do you begin searching the attic trunks, to see if there is something old in there you can let me wear? when I tell you that Im hungry why does your stomach begin to clench? when I tell you how Im feeling why do you reach for the radio to turn to a song you like better? when I tell you of years that vanish into cloudforms why is a brighter light suddenly called for? when I tell you of the closeness of the soil, beneath the foot of a mantis why does your lower lip tremble from the word "god"? when I tell you I am homeless why do you feel a sudden need to travel to the sea? when I tell you that one needle from a single norway spruce, is enough to brighten my thoughts why do you ask me what I do for my living? when I tell you of the song that Ive yet to write why do you give me tales from your wedding night? when I tell you what the spring breezes were trying to whisper to me where did you think you would hide? will you meet me now, that you know what mysteries have poured from the heart? can you still your cheek, or your eyelids, through one meal and listen to the sound of the sun crossing the sky? here is where it waits- here is where it was left for you to find that very day you put the distance of three thousand lifetimes between us Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 great lines in this and excellent immagery. i absolutely love this. i applaud you rumi. vic Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 great! inspired - and very rumi'esque! beautiful thoughts and images... Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 This one is comprehensive and leaves no stone unturned. I think it's your "Janitor" prose piece brought to verse. (I'm drawing this conclusion from the discussion which followed the prose piece.) These two "parts of the whole" are my fav's: when I tell you I am homeless why do you feel a sudden need to travel to the sea? when I tell you of the song that Ive yet to write why do you give me tales from your wedding night? The former inspires me; I can somehow relate to it the most. The latter is unsettling; I would be irritated if that happened. Thank you for this, Rumisong. I enjoyed it a lot. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 Thank you guys, very much tonyv wrote: I can somehow relate to it the most. if you can find out how, Id love to hear Tony... Id be fascinated by your read of that line especially Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Thank you guys, very much tonyv wrote: I can somehow relate to it the most. if you can find out how, Id love to hear Tony... Id be fascinated by your read of that line especially Ah, Rumisong, I think it somehow appeals to my sense of adventure or longing to escape. when I tell you I am homeless why do you feel a sudden need to travel to the sea? I took "travel to the sea" to mean "on the high seas" as opposed to "going to the shore." (I'm not sure which one you meant, but that's how I read it.) I guess, if one lives and works on a ship, he has a home of sorts (at least while he is at work), and that would probably be better than being homeless on the streets. Perhaps it just invokes a false sense of security within me. But, you know, as they say: a false sense of security better than none! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 ah, thank you so very much- its just what I was asking... yes, the false sense of security is what was there when that line came out- when someone meets someone who is homeless, what is the impulse that rises up in ones gut? to escape, to feel secure, to return "home" as nature itself- the vastness of our "home" seen as the ocean (and a ship on the ocean is perfect for this too)- the need to feel safe in the midst of that vastness... thanks T! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Rumisong I enjoyed reading this abstract poem, what goes in only two ways. It sounds as a dialog but with your own. The sense of this poem is very mystical and it gives a real picture of a dervish, with all those questions and guessing. Very deep and meaningful poem. I loved this one Rumi. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 thank you Aleksandra Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 RS, Really, really good- a nice clear rumi-nation on the nature of self, the self in the relation to the world, and the world in relationship to love, home and back to the self... Very much enjoyed this!!! DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Hi rumisong, This is inspired and inspiring. So many images that took my mind to other places. Of them all my single favorite line is rumisong wrote: when I tell you that one needle from a single norway spruce, is enough to brighten my thoughts On reading this my spirit took flight. Thank you. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 The title caught my attention and the poem held it. when I tell you that Im a tree why does your finger begin to reach for a book of names and addresses? That made me smile, despite the underlying sense of desperation and distance in understanding. badge :0) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 Oh my goodness! Thank you SO much all! Im utterly delighted that this has touched you! Alexsandra- yes I love the way youve put this- 'a two way dialogue with oneself' - perfect! Tink- "take flight" now has to make its way into whatever poem arrives next (my heart is soaring reading everyones comments, believe me!) Dr C- "the self in the relation to the world, and the world in relationship to love, home and back to the self" poetry that describes this poem, thank you! Badge- yes, and underlying sense of desperation was here when it arrived - great catch! (going through some loss currently, Ill try to say more about it later perhaps) and that particular line was in reference to someone listening to a poet speaking of his relationship to nature, ("I AM a tree") and reaching for the addressbook in his or her blackberry or cell phone to call for "professional help", so to speak (thats why I saw a "finger" reaching for the names- as in a digital keypad) there are a few lines, which Im still not sure what they were trying to say cheers everyone- and thanks for making my day! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Hi rumisong,, I liked the repetition used here, which drives the movement of emotion in the poem. Very well written. Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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