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Let me be your fallen king!


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I will never ask you

Why your tears so colorless

I will never ask you

Why your sorrows let you down

I will never ask you

Why your hands don’t hold mine

 

I will only ask to

Fly like butterfly

With your tiny little smile

You will be, then, my cute firefly

Spreading the light of happiness

All over my paradise

 

You couldn’t forget your past

For why the world becomes harder

To survive a breath or to catch a kiss

A constant frustration in your heart

Claps like mocking clown

That sounds like piercing my world

Having thousands wounds

We cry in silence screams

Only the tears may sooth the pains

 

You sit still and I watch the pain

Your silent complains make me insane!

That’s why you runaway

I will follow your footsteps

You hide your tears

I will catch the drops

You sit like a fallen queen

Please let me be your fallen king!

 

I saw your oceans cripples in thousand waves

Catches the shore with thousands complains

Shore has nothing left, but to hear

Spoils it’s edge without care

Sorrows made him solid

Like the rock that shed no more!

 

 

I will make you fly in wide blue sky

To make you watch the world

How beautiful without recession

Or tension!

We lived a beautiful life, waiting for more

Flying like fireflies, it’s time to score!

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Very trance-like, Rony. This one has a mesmerizing effect. The way you depict the anxiety and helplessness is first-rate --

A constant frustration in your heart

Claps like mocking clown

That sounds like piercing my world ...

 

You sit still and I watch the pain

Your silent complains make me insane!

-- and the way you characterize the one whom you languish for evokes a special kind of longing and loneness that can't be described in any other way:

You sit like a fallen queen

Please let me be your fallen king!

The end is upbeat:

I will make you fly in wide blue sky

To make you watch the world

How beautiful without recession

Or tension!

We lived a beautiful life, waiting for more

Flying like fireflies, it’s time to score!

Thus, the poem takes me to a number of different levels. I relish the highs and lows.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

very poetic and beautiful imagrery and sckemes. loved it. enjoyable read.

 

vic

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Great Soul in this work- I especially liked these lines:

You couldn’t forget your past

For why the world becomes harder

To survive a breath or to catch a kiss

A constant frustration in your heart

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Aleksandra

Rony, wonderful expressed poem. The metaphors works nicely and gives sensitive and poetical sound to the poem

I especially love this expression:

To survive a breath or to catch a kiss

 

and then this wonderful metaphor:

Claps like mocking clown

That sounds like piercing my world

Having thousands wounds

 

I enjoyed your poem Rony. It's well written.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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