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How I Look At Life


Larsen M. Callirhoe
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Larsen M. Callirhoe

How I Look At Life

 

You put my head under water.

They tell me to breathe easier for awhile.

It is hard to breathe under water

even I know that.

Many times I wanted you

your flesh naked

while taking a cold shower.

 

Flowers in a vase

on the kitchen table.

 

Darling I forgive you

after all it is hard to be alone

in this crazy mixed up world.

 

I want you to see me as I am.

 

After all I should know.

I am a twisted mind

from years of being paralyzed.

 

My mind is warped

life for me is not high and dry

and clean cut as you think.

 

I have skeletons in the closet.

But not enough ghosts to scare you dear.

 

Just know there is no baggage with me.

I want to write you a love poem.

Can’t you see I love you.

 

We dreamed of all the good things we could do.

Those were the days my friend, yes those were the days.

Remember how we use to share all the laughter.

Now the years have passed us by.

 

What have we done with our life’s.

The years have gone by in turmoil.

We shared laughter together

and yes even the tears.

 

I want to stay in love with your soul.

Come to bed with me.

I don’t want to sleep alone tonight.

Don’t hide from me.

 

No more games in the dark.

I don’t want to forget how it feels.

To walk upon the grass

and feel the sand on my toes

on a sandy beach.

 

We share the sunrise together

hand in hand.

Will you share the sunset with me.

I want you to walk with me in this life

or will we fade into the darkness

cold and all alone.

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Well done Vic. a brilliant 'walk' through your own life and love- I really like, this 'leap' you've made in your recent writings, a little more distant, which ironically makes it more universally intimate---

 

Enjoyed!

 

DC

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

Hi DC,

 

i have been trying to improve my writing style in my poetry especially free verse which can be hard for the reader to understand or relate to. i use the simple aabbb aabb or abab cdcd pattern but i have been told i force it so i stick to what i am decent at which is free verse. i have been reading tinker's post on this forum about verse poetry and i think it has helped improved my writings greatly,

 

swo thanks for commenting.

larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Aleksandra

Dear Victor. I love the sentiment in this poem. I can feel the magic in this poem. And also I found here two poems in one.

 

If I was the writer on this poem, this part I would leave alone and finish one poem:

 

How I Look At Life

 

You put my head under water.

They tell me to breathe easier for awhile.

It is hard to breathe under water

even I know that.

Many times I wanted you

your flesh naked

while taking a cold shower.

 

Flowers in a vase

on the kitchen table.

 

Darling I forgive you

after all it is hard to be alone

in this crazy mixed up world.

 

I want you to see me as I am.

 

After all I should know.

I am a twisted mind

from years of being paralyzed.

 

My mind is warped

life for me is not high and dry

and clean cut as you think.

 

I have skeletons in the closet.

But not enough ghosts to scare you dear.

 

Just know there is no baggage with me.

I want to write you a love poem.

Can’t you see I love you.

 

I like the rest of the poem too. But the first part worked more powerful on me. I love the expression: I have skeletons in the closet.

 

I enjoyed the poem a lot my friend. I like that you are in some inspired period.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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I agree with the others, Victor. I've always enjoyed your knack for keeping it real; it's a skill which you seem to have honed lately. I would characterize the development of your style as "progressive."

 

Happy birthday, btw.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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