April 4 Gutted

[Tinker]

Gutted

What is this internal wrenching
tearing apart
throbbing 
ache?
he's gone away
left me
ache?
he won't be back
empty
ache?
      ~~jvg

Notes: ▼

Prompt: heartbreak

Verse Form: Zeno s a recently invented form created by J. Patrick Lewis. "it was inspired by the mathematical “hailstone sequence,” simply explained here…. I call the form a “Zeno,” so named for Zeno, the philosopher of paradoxes, especially the dichotomy paradox, according to which getting anywhere involves first getting halfway there and then again halfway there, and so on ad infinitum."

The elements of the Zeno are:

1. a decastich, a poem in 10 lines
2. syllabic, syllables per line 8-4-2-1-4-2-1-4-2-1
3. rhymed, x x x a x x a x x a, x being unrhymed or only L4, L7 and L10 (the one syllable lines) rhyme.>/li>

[dr_con]

Visceral and vicious and maybe viscous? That hacking up of what the internal wrenching brings forth? ;_) Really a nice write and an interesti9ng form. Thanks Judy! 

[Tinker]

Haha, thanks Juris.   My work is sooooo simple compared to yours.  But we all have our "thing".   I'm always chasing down new forms.   Not great poetry but a fun discipline.

~~Judi

[tonyv]

Oh Judi, this can't possibly be for real! No one leaves you! He'll be sorry ...

Tony 🔪