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April 24 Balwo #1


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Aiy Ay Old Man, I stub my toe on your walker
Aiy Ay Old Man, where did the hard heat go?
Aiy Ay Old Man, I miss the sweat of past passion,
Oh, to feel the pain of urgency once more.
                                    ~~ Judi Van Gorder

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Aiy Ay Old Man, I stub my toe on your walker
Aiy Ay Old Man, where did the hard heat go?
Aiy Ay Old Man, I miss the sweat of past passion,
Oh, to revisit the urgency just once more.
                                    ~~ Judi Van Gorder

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~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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Its about the rhythm.   Oh, to revisit the urgency once more.   or Oh, to revisit the urgency one more time.   or Oh, to feel the urgency one more time. or  Oh, to feel the pain of urgency once more.

~~Judi

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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