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At Jacky's1

My sweetest love, I will stand still for you!
Now, you -- here, next to me -- out on the path,
then at the Galaxie, our two long straws 
submerging into a ceramic bowl.
Sushi, an arachnid's sting, and families.
Then, you -- in front of me -- with the light low
and the room spinning, no place else to go,
nowhere I would rather go, just you.

 

1. Jacky's Galaxie: an Asian/fusion restaurant

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Jacky’s should pay you for permission to put this in an ad or on their menu.

This is really good.  

2 hours ago, tonyv said:

Then, you -- in front of me -- with the light low
and the room spinning, no place else to go,
nowhere I would rather go, just you.

Who knew you were such a romantic?

~~Judi

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Judi & Juris, thank you both very much. I know it's my poetry month submittal for the past ten days, but this one was start to finish yesterday in less than an hour. For that little time, it's the best I could do.

Tony :happy:

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39 minutes ago, tonyv said:

but this one was start to finish yesterday in less than an hour. For that little time, it's the best I could do.

Tony :happy:

Then you have no excuses..... Where are the rest of the poems?  You owe us 9. 😍

~~Judi

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our two long straws 
submerging into a ceramic bowl.

There's something really awesome about this line! Vaguely humorous and entirely visceral, in-the-moment.

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Sushi, an archnid's sting, and families.

Hmm, an interesting and mysterious trio. I think you meant "arachnid"?

"Bowl/low/go" works well, a sprinkling of rhyme like pepper on a meal.

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and the room spinning, no place else to go,
nowhere I would rather go, just you.

Mmm, I can only wonder what makes the room spin--a delightful drink, some fancy lighting, the drunkenness of love, or some potent cocktail thereof!

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nowhere I would rather go, just you.

I like the idea of a person being framed as a destination.

Finally, you've widened your orbit out of the Waterside Lounge--nice to see! I think Jacky's brings out your civility. 😉

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1 minute ago, A. Baez said:

Hmm, an interesting and mysterious trio. I think you meant "arachnid"?

Thank you! It's a typo, and I fixed it. But it's not so mysterious if you've ever shared a Scorpion Bowl. 🧉 (Scorpions aren't spiders, but they are arachnids!)

4 minutes ago, A. Baez said:

Mmm, I can only wonder what makes the room spin--a delightful drink, some fancy lighting, the drunkenness of love, or some potent cocktail thereof!

Any and all of it. :happy:

5 minutes ago, A. Baez said:

I like the idea of a person being framed as a destination.

I like how you've characterized it.

7 minutes ago, A. Baez said:

Finally, you've widened your orbit out of the Waterside Lounge--nice to see! I think Jacky's brings out your civility. 😉

What had you said some time back, something about contradictions? 😏

Thank you very much for your kind remarks,

Tony

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...it's not so mysterious if you've ever shared a Scorpion Bowl. 🧉

I looked up a recipe--no scorpions! 😲

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What had you said some time back, something about contradictions? 😏

Dr. Jekyll is on the ascendant!! Cherish the moment. 🎆

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