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JoelJosol
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His poem

lifted my eyes

 

up the ceiling

of his ambition,

 

from where his lines hang

down to expose a body,

 

twisted,

breathless.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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goldenlangur

Hello JoelJosol,

 

How well you suggest and not tell allowing the reader a layered interpretation.

 

 

The contrast between ceiling of his ambition and the body exposed is startling ad works well to convey a brutal sense of reckoning.

 

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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JJ,

 

A wonderful piece- simply superb. Stark Powerful- "a finger pointing" well done...

 

DC

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Aleksandra

Tinker wrote:

 

Joel, WOW! You just crossed over to the next level of artistry.
This powerful poem took my breath away.

 

~~Tink

 

Ah definitely I agree with Tinker. The poems takes the breath.

 

Amazing poem. Goes in the group of the best poems of yours :).

 

The end hits:

 

from where his lines hang

down to expose a body,

 

twisted,

breathless

 

Excellent job.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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