rumisong Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 this one is from Nov, 2005 - but someone reminded me of it today, and so I thought Id post it- it came to me after coming upon this Artists terrific work... Debra Hurd (link) ____JAZZ __Lines that run through ____wild abandonings _________spill patterns and _ shapes __of our chaos lives ___________that cannot measure ____or be measured _to our certain satisfactions ____giving us the color ____________that only a note can satisfy ______coming out of the very soul __________of my life ____born of that most ________translucent ___________sound of the child _____________________I once was ________this is my ____JAZZ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 Love this. The words are great but the form- The form is pure jazz. great work rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 Rumi, this is cool~ It has a great vibe... I love it. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 i have to say i love it also. well written very articulate work by you. i love jazz. my favorite jazz song is feels so good by chuck magone may not of spelt the name right. i love his greatest hits cd. when i am in tthe mood for jazz i play it. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 23, 2009 Author Share Posted May 23, 2009 cool is cool ! thanks all- its fun to come back to something from years ago its like someone else's poem victor, Chuck Mangione is one of the most underrated musicians ever, if you asked me... I had six of his on vinyl- and they were among my favorites... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 Must say I agree with everyone- Love it- beautiful form which accentuates the content and title excellent! DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 23, 2009 Author Share Posted May 23, 2009 thanks Dr C, I managed to find a way to get a jpeg of how it originally appeared online- it looked kinda cool I thought, even if a bit "cheesy"... check it out (link) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 I see colors when I look at this poem with it's perfect title (in all upper case letters) and perfect layout on the screen/page. It's very "Great Gatsby." I love the ending -- ________ this is my ____JAZZ. Not any jazz, not just jazz, but my jazz! Thanks for sharing the inspirational artwork, too. Tony [Edit in after your most recent comment: I think this is an instance when the typographical layout of the poem actually complements the poem and isn't merely a gimmick. The picture of the poem with the graphics looks like it would work well as part of a program for a concert, but the colors certainly aren't necessary. In fact (though somehow appropriate) I find them distracting; your poem speaks for itself.] Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 I love your poem Rumi. The sense, the form, the jpeg. All in one makes a good composition. It looks and sounds great. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted May 23, 2009 Author Share Posted May 23, 2009 cool! thanks Aleksandra Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 I likes jazz as someone said. I like this all too rumi. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted May 23, 2009 Share Posted May 23, 2009 Fragmented and yet threaded. Always did like that word translucent good one Rumi badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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