eclipse Posted July 5, 2020 Share Posted July 5, 2020 The ghost of a rainforest with the last fires of a bonsai sun in its eyes lays down on the pond, the moon is caught between the wings of a limbata dragonfly one of Singapore's sons. Clouds run blindly for a non existent train they detect yellow markings reflected on water and the urge to protect a rare dragonfly. Whose hands guide the synthetic sun as concrete is poured tonne by tonne, mine the cache in the limbatas eyes of black, hushed cries from the light of dying stars. Drumming wings dipped in fire inaudible to distant kings who caress darkness, they are ordained to bring desecration to rainforests, gold tears are loaned from melting crowns. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted July 5, 2020 Share Posted July 5, 2020 5 hours ago, eclipse said: The ghost of a rainforest with the last fires of a bonsai sun in its eyes lays down on the pond, the moon is caught between the wings of a limbata dragonfly one of Singapore's sons. Clouds run blindly for a non existent train they detect yellow markings reflected on water and the urge to protect a rare dragonfly. Whose hands guide the synthetic sun as concrete is poured tonne by tonne, mine the cache in the limbatas eyes of black, hushed cries from the light of dying stars. Drumming wings dipped in fire inaudible to distant kings who caress darkness, they are ordained to bring desecration to rainforests, gold tears are loaned from melting crowns. Barry, this is unbelievably good. It's in tune with environmental concerns but doesn't come across as preachy. The poem is immediately striking with the appearance of The ghost of a rainforest with the last fires of a bonsai sun in its eyes, a novel and memorable image. It is all exceptionally good, especially the first sentence of the second paragraph and the references to "distant kings who caress darkness." Excellent work. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted July 15, 2020 Share Posted July 15, 2020 This is so rich in imagery, it flows like molten gold. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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