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"Suffering ain't work

or all of us would be paid for just liv'n "- Unknown

 

You know what the secret of a Good drink is?

Like that story Creeley used to tell, about a

guy who stole his scotch, it was his regular

dive, before Rexroth tossed him out and he

was bored, and just wanting the lizard-on

a-rock. quiet he deserved after a day set-

by, for poetry and sex and power-this

guy steals his drink and he's drunk

and warm and looking to-put his

skin-on display for tattooing

and he hauls-back

 

all righteous and ready

and the bartender leans over

grabs 'em both and declares, "Robert this

is Jackson", Pollock and Creeley and they both

had a good laugh about that, see they recognized

 

each other, but that ain't a Good drink

that's a ladder climbing, figure-out who

you are here, a Good drink is when you

wake up a different person than the one

 

who went to bed

always two drinks

from me, the nothing

 

the unknowing

the fall from grace

running away from or too

doesn't matter, just this bar

 

and the pickled eggs

both Sulfur and Manna

the emptiness is the same

 

it's up to you the side

and the nature

of that bed you

woke up-on.

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An excellent embodiment of artists into a work of art that inspires camaraderie among contemporaries, Dr Con. I love this part:

... a Good drink is when you

wake up a different person than the one

 

who went to bed

always two drinks

from me, the nothing

 

the unknowing

the fall from grace

running away from or too

doesn't matter, just this bar

 

and the pickled eggs

both Sulfur and Manna

the emptiness is the same

 

it's up to you the side

and the nature

of that bed you

woke up-on.

It's somehow like a synthesis out of which a new and higher level of truth has come to light.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Many Thanks Tony! I was worried it wouldn't translate well, being a spontaneous "Folksy" explosion based on weeks of composting certain idea- was concerned that it wouldn't translate to the reader- Thanks for putting my woories aside;-)

 

Dr. Con

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

hi DC,

 

love the philosophy in the poem and philosophical approach in the poem. i can relate with the last stanza and a half.

 

thanks for the read. you message was conveyed very tactfully.

 

larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Aleksandra

I like what Tony has to say on this poem Dr.Con. His comment helped me a lot and I feel the sense of the poem - much more.

I like the poem. It's one of those hard for writing and hard for reading. Nice done.

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Thanks Aleks for your engagement in my sometimes twisted views;-)

 

DC

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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Afternoon Good Dr,

 

As usual I am not quite sure if this work is literal or metaphorical. I have decided to take it literally. Again, as usual, your work must be read slowly with a studied eye to be absorbed fully. Again, as usual, it is worth the study.

 

I have met many a man in the same way and awakened on both sides of the bed. Sometimes better; sometime not so much; sometime without change. I have invested 10 years of my life with a man met in much the same way. A good investment as I awaken each day better for having fallen asleep in the right bed.

 

This may not be the path your were following but it is the path I took. Thanks for leading me there.

 

rg

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I'm glad you took it as literal and as personal- Your critique was wondrous, and congrats @ finally stumbling through the 'right door' RG!

 

;-)

 

DC

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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Hi DC, I really enjoyed reading this. It has an easy bantering feel about it and yet there is a tension that makes it interesting. I love the characters which of course drew me in immediately. But it is the evolution of the poem that is most fascinating. I guess we all find ourselves there, one way or another. Well done.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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Thanks Tink!

 

The Story by Creeley is true;-)

 

DC

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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