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Yesterday's Coat


rhymeguy
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Wrapped in yesterday's coat

permeated with the stench of someone else’s life.

It is warm.

It was free.

He sleeps.

He dreams.

Dreams of a coat

that smells only of him.

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There seems to be a run on excellent minimalist poems! A fine contribution RG- palatable pathos and longing in a few succint words- excellent!

 

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goldenlangur

Hi rg,

 

A great metaphor for life itself - there's a wistfulness that suggests a loss and with this comes longing and perhaps some fragment of hope that his sense of himself survives in some form:

 

Wrapped in yesterday's coat

permeated with the stench of someone else’s life.

 

And:

 

He dreams.

Dreams of a coat

that smells only of him.

 

 

 

So much in just a few words.

 

 

 

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Wonderful short metaphorical poem. I love it.

I love the pause in the poem in the middle part. Well done.

 

Aleksandra

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I like when I can read a poem in several ways, Rhymeguy, and this is one of those poems: the "he" in lines five and six could be the wearer or the donor of the coat (if taken within the context of a relationship). I also like how you employ the third person; in my reading (replete with multiple possibilities), it could even reference the narrator himself.

 

Tony

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So many lovely comments, thank you. Each of you bring so much talent, knowledge and wisdom to this place. I am continualy awed by this collective group. I aspire to possess even a modicum of the skill I find here each time I visit. Additionally you are kind and patient with me as I seek to grow. Thank you for your encouragement and inspiration.

 

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