dr_con Posted October 4, 2020 Share Posted October 4, 2020 Rain is a Hard Consonant Rain hits harder when Letting World In without judgment Or an outside. Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 9, 2020 Share Posted October 9, 2020 Juris, I hadn't thought of rain as a consonant, but that's exactly what it is, and a "hard" one. This is terrific. Haiku/tanka-like but better! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted October 27, 2020 Share Posted October 27, 2020 hi Juris Great title. Buy into the L1-3. Is L4 needed? cheers Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted October 29, 2020 Author Share Posted October 29, 2020 Thanks guys. Hmmm, Phil you have a point. Was sticking to a form, replacing vowels with hard consonants, much like the original Japanese or Chinese. But you have a point;-) Thanks Tony for seeing through my thin attempt at form;-) Hope you'all are well. J 1 Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted November 9, 2020 Share Posted November 9, 2020 Hi doc, I too like the haikuesque clarity of this piece, the startling assertions. Thanks, - David Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted November 12, 2020 Share Posted November 12, 2020 It is the same impression I got, am I reading a haiku? So my mind started building the structure. But the symbolical experience of raining hard and letting the world in (into some secure private space perhaps as contrast) opened it up for the reader to consume and make sense for himself. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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