JoelJosol Posted November 12, 2020 Share Posted November 12, 2020 There are lies and there areflies. These will not take you to the moonor flay you before the stars.Interestingly, like parent-birds,the instinct is to fight back, kamikaze-like:fly to the depths and crash.But, the advertised phytochemicalsaren't scraping the fat off my veins:Come on, burn, baby, burn.What do I do with you nowand how? Look, the plate left unfinished,has a fly feasting on it. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted November 15, 2020 Share Posted November 15, 2020 Joel, I like the jarring impressions of futility I get from this poem. Verse after verse, I'm left with a hollow sense that it's all for naught, it's all in vain. Very nicely done. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted November 23, 2020 Author Share Posted November 23, 2020 Thanks for the read. It is a collage of images and impressions built around the play of the word 'fly'. It plays intentionally with the reader's association with the word 'fly' and changes the experience for every reader. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 15, 2020 Share Posted December 15, 2020 Quote It is a collage of images and impressions built around the play of the word 'fly'. It plays intentionally with the reader's association with the word 'fly' and changes the experience for every reader. An interesting approach Joel, though does it shift the communication to the reader? The poem's meaning becomes a writing execise, plaything, for the reader? Though, I guess the readers in workshops are writers anyway! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted December 15, 2020 Share Posted December 15, 2020 Yes, JJ a finely futile poem, one of frustration and its free-flying associations;-) Enjoyed! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted December 16, 2020 Share Posted December 16, 2020 Brevity is excellent.. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted December 19, 2020 Author Share Posted December 19, 2020 Thanks guys for the read and the experience you get from reading it. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gunslinger Posted May 4, 2021 Share Posted May 4, 2021 Interesting perspective. Burn, baby, burn, indeed. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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